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Rach Runner · Beast

Need advice!

Siamese712 · I blamed it on the dog...

Advice?....Advice?....Advice?.... idea

Detail all ways mackes a diference.

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Insperation can come from anywhere. It can come from t.v. shows, books, movies, drawing, even just what happened to you that day. You just gotta keep your mind open for it.

Also, it helps to write about something that you care about.

Skifox · Frelengian

Characterization is key. Try to convey the personality and emotions of the characters in the descriptions and the dialog. Let us inside their heads from time to time, and remember to watch your pacing. You don't want anything to feel forced.

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

Write how you feel is easiest. I usually write the fan fics as though they're scripts. But you can write them how ever you want.

And if you feel the story you're writing will have predictable moments and you want it to be more exciting and original, write something that we never even think of you writing. My fan fics "The Big Sneeze" and "Barney's Big Adventure" are good examples of unexpected events.

-- Edited by Akira_Cat at 02:42, 2007-05-15

Rach Runner · Beast

Thaks guys!

Rach Runner · Beast

Here is Sort of my beginig ofmy story

Rev's Old Friend
One day at L.U. H.Q. everyone was doing their normal things the doorbell rang. Rev sipped over and answered it when the door opened Rev stopped dead in his tracks it was Rach Runner Rev's old friend who worked at the pizza place were he used to work.Rev said "Hi" very shyly. he liked her liked her, but just could not tell her. She said "Hi" back. He invited her in and introdused her to everyone.he gave her a tour of H.Q. They shared news and information. She liked everything Rev showed her and told her about his job that she wanted to become a L.U.

Thats all for now!

Kenny McCormick · Anthros

[Hmm...It seems to me that you need a beta-reader.]

[You need more details, you need to work on fixing the run-on sentences, and check your spelling. Nobody can understand what you are trying to say if you miss these important parts of story writing.]

[But, all of those points aside, I can see where this story is going. However, it would be better if you made a proper introduction of some sort for your character.]

Skifox · Frelengian

Definitely add more details. Break out the thesaurus and try to vary your word choice a bit. Slow down the pacing, too. There's nothing limiting the length, so there's no need to rush through. Take the time to really describe in depth what's going on. Try to paint a mental picture for your readers.

Remember the rule about dialog: Start a new paragraph or line every time a different character speaks, and break up individual events the same way. It'll make the story a lot easier to read. Watching your punctuation will increase readability, as well.