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Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

In Search of Tweetums: The Fan Re-Write!

zadavias_spirit · Out of This World

Yayz!!! Tech and Rev do stuff!!!

!!!!!!!!
I'm liking this a lot. Hopefully we'll see a lot more development in side plots in this episode.

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Thank z_s! Tech and Rev definitely are to play much more prominent roles in my re-write that's for sure!

Kenny McCormick · Anthros

[A rewrite? Very nice. I knew that the episode "In Search of Tweetums" should have been planned better than the way it was written.]

[I really like this idea. Go for it; I would like to see how this turns out.]

([Although I would have liked imagining what both Tech and Rev were doing other than this...or before...Hehehe...])

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Yay!!!

Tech and Rev to the rescue!!!! biggrin

Go boys go!!!!

Awsome so far B_O!!! I luv that these two are getting more air time in this rewrite. Tho' i luv Ace, I still wished that they all get the same amount of air time.

Are you gunna throw out the Ace vs. Deuce battle scene? confused

Siamese712 · I blamed it on the dog...

I think it going prity well so far

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

Yay! Go Rev and Tech! I can't wait for more of the rewrite!

Skifox · Frelengian

I really like the way you're handling this storyline. It's already soooooooo much better than the official version!

Rev and Tech get to do stuff!

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

doggirl2772 wrote:

Yay!!! Tech and Rev to the rescue!!!! Go boys go!!!!

Awsome so far B_O!!! I luv that these two are getting more air time in this rewrite. Tho' i luv Ace, I still wished that they all get the same amount of air time.

Are you gunna throw out the Ace vs. Deuce battle scene?

Nope. I'm gonna try and improve it! I hope....

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

And here's chappie 2! Hopefully Tweetums is not as annoying here as he is on the show!

Chapter 2

Meanwhile, over on planet Blanc, Ace, Lexi, Duck, Slam and Sylth Vester are flying around the planet searching for Tweetums.

“This is hopeless! We’re not gonna find Tweetums by just flying around like this!” Lexi states.

“All these decoy robot Tweetums aren’t helping either.” Duck complains.

A pair of red lenses over Ace’s goggles retract upwards again.

“And I ain’t pickin’ up anything on infra-red. His Royal Highness has hidden himself well.” Ace grimly informs. “Sylth, you know this planet better than any of us, you got any ideas where Tweetums could be layin’ low?”

Sylth Vester ponders to himself for a moment. “Hmm, there’s an extensive underground network that runs beneath this planet’s surface. That might a good place to start looking.”

“Lead the way then Sylth.” Ace instructs.

“I don’t think we should be following that pussy cat anywhere!” Duck complains in Ace’s ear.

“He’s all we got to go on right now Duck,” Ace responds, “and we need to find Tweetums before Optimatus does!”

As Ace’s group flies off, Optimatus and Rupes Oberon emerges from some shadows on hover bikes.

“Now we just follow the rabbit to the prize.” Optimatus darkly chuckles.

The two villains head off in Ace’s group’s direction.

Soon, Ace and his group land. Sylth Vester leads them into a dark cavernous tunnel that dips downwards. Duck generates an energy orb and lifts up his arm to provide a light for the group to see. They walk for a while before reaching a point where the track splits into three possible further paths.

“Oh great! Now which way do we go?” Duck questions in annoyance.

“Sylth?” Ace prompts.

Sylth Vester uncertainly looks at each of the three paths. He decides to take a guess.

“Errm, einey, menie, miney, moe!”

Sylth ends up pointing at the path on the far right. “Maybe this one?!”

“Right, in that case, we should go this way then!” Duck says pointing to the middle path.

“What? Why?” Sylth asks puzzled.

“Cause we don’t trust you!” Duck rudely replies. He strides off down the middle path.

Slam looks confused and Ace and Lexi shrug to one another before following after Duck. Sylth grumbles to himself as he trails behind the group. They quickly find themselves in a large cavern, facing a huge set of decorated doors.

“This looks like a place where Tweetums would be hiding!” Lexi comments as they approach the large doors.

The group notices a set of levers to the side of the doors.

“One of these must open them doors.” Ace guesses.

“Well go on then pussy cat! Pull a lever!” Duck roughly commands of Sylth.

“Nu uh! If I know that canary, he’ll most likely have booby trapped all those levers!” Sylth refuses. “Get him to do it!”

Sylth pushes Slam toward the levers. Slam shrugs and pulls a random lever. Sylth and Duck laugh to themselves as they think they have avoided a potential trap, but then they hear a rumbling sound from above. As they look up, a pile of rocks descends down on their heads. They are buried in a heap of rocks. Then the large doors open.

“Good choice Slam!” Lexi compliments.

Ace, Lexi and Slam enter through the doors. Duck and Sylth Vester grumble as they pull themselves out of the heap of fallen rocks and follow after the other three. The group find themselves in a large extravagant hall with odd egg-shaped robotic drones driving around. Ahead of them, they see the back of a small throne. The throne swivels round to reveal none other than Tweetums. Tweetums instantly jumps up when he sees the Loonatics and runs to them.

“My friends! Oh goodie! You finawy came and found me!” Tweetums excitedly cries.

“Yeah, oh goodie.” Duck sarcastically mutters.

“I was vewy wowied about you all not reaching me safewy!” Tweetums continues in relief. “Y’see, those big mean men are after me and my woyal sceptre!”

Tweetums holds up his royal sceptre to show to Ace and the others. “It’s the key to the wormhole generator that can take you anywhere in the universe! Those nasty men mustn’t get this sceptre!”

Just then, a startling explosion from the throne area grabs the group’s attention. They all look up to see Optimatus and Rupes standing a few yards from them.

“Too bad ‘Your Highness’! Your sceptre is as good as mine now!” Optimatus chortles.

“You cats better give the O-man what he wants or there’ll be trouble a plenty!” Rupes rhythmically threatens, pointing his keyboard weapon at the group.

“Loonatics! Defend Tweetums and the sceptre!” Ace commands.

Ace, Lexi, Slam and Duck encircle Tweetums, taking on fighting stances.

“Well I’m not actually a Loonatic…” Sylth states.

Duck grabs the feline’s wrist and drags him into their protective barrier line.

“But I guess I don’t have much of a choice.” he finishes.

“So be it.” Optimatus emotionlessly says as he raises a glowing hand.

The two villains fire on the tight circle of Loonatics. Ace whips out his Guardian Strike Sword and deflects Optimatus’ multi-coloured spectrum blast. Lexi fires a brain blast at Rupes’ keyboard energy blast, cancelling it out in mid-air. Then Slam launches a mini tornado at Rupes, but Rupes fires another keyboard energy blast and knocks the mini tornado back toward the Loonatics, causing them to scatter in various directions.

“Duck! Get Tweetums out of here!” Ace commands quickly.

“C’mon half-pint! I’m getting you outta here!” Duck informs Tweetums urgently.

Duck scoops up Tweetums and teleports a few metres away from the fight. But Optimatus catches sight of him and fires a blast of his light energy at the mallard. It hits his back, knocking him beak-down onto the floor.

“Sir Duck!” Tweetums cries in fright.

As Tweetums runs to help Duck, he finds himself being picked up from behind by Optimatus’ large hand.

“You’re mine now you insignificant little bird!” Optimatus satisfactorily utters. “There’s no place left for you to run!”

Tweetums struggles in vain in Optimatus’ tight grip. “Help! Sir Duck!” he cries aloud.

“Oh no! He has Tweetums!” Lexi gasps as she and the others see the canary royalty in Optimatus’ grip.

Optimatus fires a wide-spanning beam of his light energy at the heroes, sending them all skidding across the floor. He and Rupes then make their way out of the hall through the large doors, with Tweetums as their prisoner.

“Bury them!” Optimatus orders to Rupes.

Rupes aims his keyboard weapon up at the rock ceiling and fires a blast at it. A shower of heavy rocks rains down over the entrance to the hall, blocking the Loonatics in.

“NO!” Duck shouts as he runs up to the tightly-blocked entrance way.

“Maybe I can brain-blast us out!” Lexi suggests.

She charges up a brain blast and fires it at the blocked entrance way, but the impact of the blast serves only to send vibrations shuddering through the rest of the hall, dangerously loosening more rocks from the ceiling.

“Whoah! Better hold up on the brain-blasts there Lexi!” Ace orders. “You could bring this whole place down on top of us!”

The trapped heroes look to one another in dismay.

“Ulagurabuh what do now?” Slam questions.

“I don’t know…” Ace sighs pessimistically.

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Ooooooooohh this is gettin good!!!

And Duck still shows that he cares for Tweetums. Awwwwwww.....

Nice second chappie B_O!!!

Hmmmm..... I wonder how your going to try to improve that fight scene between Ace and Deuce. Hmmmmm.....

Skifox · Frelengian

Rupes showed serious Nasty Villain potential in his first appearance. Nice to see it being not squandered.

Kenny McCormick · Anthros

[I like how this is turning out; everyone seems to be in-character, which, for some people, might be hard to do. But you capture everyone's personalities pretty well. Keep going; I love this.]

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Kenny McCormick wrote:
[I like how this is turning out; everyone seems to be in-character, which, for some people, might be hard to do. But you capture everyone's personalities pretty well. Keep going; I love this.]

B_O just seems to have a talent at keeping them in character and easy to relate to. I bet she could probably make lots of the episodes better then how they are now!

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

Wow! Nice action scene there! I actually visualised it in my mind! And funny bit about Sylph and Duck with rocks falling on top of them.

That bit made me giggle.

Keep going Black Oracle! This is good!

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

doggirl2772 wrote:

B_O just seems to have a talent at keeping them in character and easy to relate to. I bet she could probably make lots of the episodes better then how they are now!

D'awww, stop flattering me doggirl! You're making me blush!

And about improving the Ace and Deuce fight scene, well, i haven't changed all that much in terms of action i'll tell ya, it's mostly the dialogue side i've tried to make more meaningful. I've tried to wrap up a few other things that we've seen before in S2 in this finale re-write. You'll see what i mean. Plus, there's some shippery toward the end! biggrin

I couldn't resist...

Thanks for the comments everyone!

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

And now we join Tech and Rev back in Acmetropolis! Here comes chapter 3!

Chapter 3

In Acmetropolis, back inside the dragon ship, a concerned Zadavia is sitting cross-armed within a locked room on a bed. She suddenly looks up when she hears crashing noises emanating from outside her room’s door. She stands up in surprise when the door slides open to reveal Rev standing there, with robot parts scattered around his feet on the floor.

“Rev!” she cries in relief.

“Sorry-to-keep-you-waiting-Zadavia,-but-i-had-to-search-a-bit-for-this-room-then-take-out-these-robot-guards-outside!” Rev explains apologetically.

“I’m just glad you’re here,” Zadavia says, “but now we best leave quickly, before more of Deuce’s robots come.”

With that, Zadavia and Rev run out of the room.

Elsewhere on the ship, two robots standing outside a closed door are unaware of a presence above them. Tech, hands and feet magnetised to the metal ceiling, looks down on the two robots. He suddenly drops himself onto the shoulders of one robot and using his electromagnetic powers, twists off its head. The second robot turns to fire on him. Tech leaps down behind the first beheaded robot and uses it as a shield. Then he pushes it forward into the second firing robot, causing them to collide and smash destructively into one another. He runs up to the closed door which slides open, then proceeds into the main control room. He stops at the control panels and looks across the many rows of buttons, switches and monitor screens.

“I could program the ship to go into a complete shut down,” Tech ponders, “but I guess it would be a lot faster if I just sabotage it all.”

Tech shuts his eyes. When they re-open they are glowing a bright green and at the same time, crackles of electricity spurt from the control panels as the ship’s systems are scrambled and wrecked remotely by Tech’s electromagnetic powers.

“Such a waste of good advanced technology.” Tech mutters half-sadly when he has finished his damage.

He then whirls around when he hears footsteps entering the control room. Deuce enters and points the cosmic guitar weapon at Tech.

“You again! Back away from the controls!” Deuce orders angrily.

“You’re too late Deuce!” Tech smirks. “I’ve seen to it this ship will never leave Earth now! You and your robot army are grounded!”

Deuce lets out a roar of fury. “You think you’ve stopped me coyote?! You’re only delaying the inevitable! Your leader Ace is the only one out of you all that’s a considerable threat to me. You and the road runner are mere bumps in the road!”

“I think you’ll find that we’re pretty ‘big’ bumps then!” Tech defiantly retorts.

Deuce lets off a blast of cosmic light energy from the cosmic guitar at Tech, knocking the coyote hard into the crackling control panels.

“I still have Zadavia’s powers in this cosmic guitar,” Deuce boasts, “and my robot army at my disposal! I can crush you and your city with a wave of a hand!”

Tech slowly pushes himself off the control panels.

“You’re nothing without your weapons Deuce!” Tech criticizes. “If I hadn’t constructed that cosmic guitar, where would you be without it and your robot army? Tell me, what have you done to ‘earn’ your great power?”

Deuce snarls dangerously at Tech. “I don’t have to ‘earn’ my power! I ‘take’ it!”

Deuce lets off another cosmic light blast at Tech, but this time Tech dives out of the way and the blast hits the control panel behind him instead. Tech then whips out a small object from his belt and tosses it at Deuce’s head. The object suddenly emits a blinding flash of light, causing Deuce to shield his eyes. As Deuce is distracted, Tech sprints out of the control room. He makes it outside of the ship where he finds Rev and Zadavia waiting for him.

“Tech!” Rev cries in relief. “What-took-you?-You-were-in-there-a-while!-We-thought-maybe-you-were-lost-or-hurt-or-”

“Are you alright Tech?” Zadavia summarises.

“Yes, but we have to move! Now!” Tech urgently states.

“You’re not going anywhere!” Deuce’s voice rings out from behind Tech, Rev and Zadavia.

The three turn to see Deuce backed by his huge robot army.

“Oh-boy!” Rev squeals.

“So you managed to escape Zadavia.” Deuce mock congratulates. “Too bad all the trouble you and your ‘animals’ have gone through to thwart me will be for nothing!”

“We shall see about that Deuce!” Zadavia icily replies.

“Annihilate them!” Deuce orders his robots, pointing at the three now very vulnerable Loonatics.

Tech, Rev and Zadavia back up to each other as a circle of robots with charging weapons closes in on them.

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!! Dang cliffhangers! That story's too exciting to put a cliffhanger on!

zadavias_spirit · Out of This World

Oh, mah, gawd.
I LUUURRVE YUUU!!!!!!!
I like the variations of Tech's powers you made. "Music Villain" did show us some nice alternatives, but the thought of Tech being magnetized to the celing, then dropping down and......
*passes out*
I reiterate, "Yayz! Tech and Rev get to do stuff!

" Can't wait to see their battle against the 'bots! But hoo will release Ace and the others, I wonder.....

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Oh noes! z_s has passed out from Tech hotness! *Fans z_s.* He! He! Yes, i've always been convinced that Tech's powers could be used in different ways other than just levitating metal objects.

You'll just have to wait a little longer to find out the fate of Ace and co. on Blanc z_s! I know cliffhangers are frustrating guys, but they keep reader interest! Muhahahaha! I lurve tormenting my readers by making them wait! But don't worry, i'm intending to update this re-write story every couple of days or so.

CassidyCoyote · Techie 4 life

zadavias_spirit wrote:

.....but the thought of Tech being magnetized to the celing, then dropping down and......
*passes out*

I agree! *passes out beside z_s*

Kenny McCormick · Anthros

[Wow...how do you write like this? I really like how this is coming along...Writing this well should be a crime. Hehehe...]

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Gasp! I'm guilty of the crime of writing well?

*Suddenly a bunch of police cars pull up beside me and some policemen walk out.*

Policemen: We're the writing police! We've received a tip from Mr. McCormick that you're writing too well! You're under arrest for good writing!

Me: *Being dragged away.* NOOOOOO!!!

He! He! Thanks Kenny and Cassidy!

*Fans unconscious Cassidy too.*

Shirako · Anthros

Hmm...arrested? My, my...

Does anyone know how much Black_Oracle's bail is?

And I have to agree; writing extremely well should be considered a crime.

...Keep up the good work.

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

*Whilst sitting in a prison cell glumly.* So, is anyone comin' to bail me out? Pretty please? He! He!

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Hehehe... awsome!! Go Tech! Go Rev! Go Zadavia! Beat those robots!! Oh and as for the bail....

-whispers something to police-
Police: -look at each other and nod- You gotta deal kid. -tosses me cell key as they walk away-
me: Thanx guys! -opens cell- There you go B_O!! I think that wil cover your bail.
B_O: -looks at me suspisously- what did you say to them?
me: I said that I'll buy them an unlimited amount of donuts and coffee with if they let you go.
B_O: Ok then.....
cops: -come back with two dump trucks filled with coffee and donuts-
me: This is gunna cost me.

-sighs- Things I do for great stories.

-- Edited by doggirl2772 at 23:03, 2007-05-22

Skifox · Frelengian

AHHHHHH! Creative use of Tech's powers FTW! biggrin

Tech's got a mouth on him, too! Even after getting knocked across the room, he's still snarky. He's just too awesome for words. *swoon*

Bloody cliffhangers, oh how you torture us so! Qu'est-ce qui se passera?

D.G.: There goes the college fund... ;)

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Me: *Skipping out of police building happily.* Thanks for bailing me out D.G.! You're a true friend!

Doggirl: But my poor wallet!

And i just can't resist making Tech awesomely cool in all my stories Ski, as you can probably tell! Tee hee!

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

No prob! Though I think its gunna take awhile to get some money again.....

Ace: Hey I was gunna go to Boopers . you got any money? hmm

me: -pulls out pockets- I dont have a penny to my name. blankstare

Ace: -looks at me funny. reads last posts. gasps- YOU DIDNT!!!

me: -sigh- I'll say it once and I'll say it again, The things I do for great stories.
Ace: Oh come on!! now how am I gunna get some ice-cream!?!

ps: Boopers is a local ice-cream store. just so ya know wink

kaejae · LUO's Next Top Poser

Heh, you even have Tweetums' annoying accent in there! XD

And oh noes! cliffhangerz!

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

I ain't about to forget Duck and Lexi's new S2 powers here in chappie 4! He! He!

Chapter 4

Underground on Blanc, Ace and his group are sitting on the rubble-covered floor of the cavern hall. A heavy silence fills the air as they all look hopelessly at the floor and emit laboured breaths.

“I should’ve just stayed in my cell! Now we’re trapped like rats!” Sylth mumbles.

Lexi breathes in and out heavily. “The air’s starting to get stale in here.”

“Hang in there Lex!” Ace urges looking at her in concern. “We just need to think of an idea.”

Duck suddenly raises his head as an idea hits him. “Lexi! Can you still call up some of your weeds with your powers?”

“I haven’t tried since leaving Apocalypso, but I could give it a go now I suppose. What do you have in mind?” Lexi replies.

“I could bring up some water from below us and use it to loosen the rocks. Then you could get some of your plant roots to push us a way through to the surface. Once we have an exit, I can flood us upwards out of here!” Duck proposes excitedly.

“It’s so crazy, it moight work!” Ace responds with a smile. “Get on it you two!”

Duck and Lexi kneel on the floor and lay their hands on it. As they focus their concentration, their hands begin glowing their respective colours. The floor begins to rumble and cracks spread across it. Ace, Slam and Sylth jump backwards as a giant cluster of plant roots bursts forth from the ground and rises to the rocky ceiling. Then from other cracks in the floor, water spurts out. Duck activates his aqua-dense powers and channels the water in a thick stream upwards to the ceiling as well. Lexi’s cluster of plant roots begins pushing through the damp, crumbling ceiling rocks, gradually forcing their way topside.

“Take a deep breath guys! We’re going up!” Duck shouts.

Water begins rapidly filling up the hall, lifting the floating Loonatics up to the hole created by the plant roots. The drenched heroes reach the surface with the rising water. After a few coughs, they pick themselves up.

“Duck, we did it!” Lexi exclaims.

“You sure did.” Sylth sarcastically grunts as he shakes some water from his wet body.

“Good going you two!” Ace compliments. “Now let’s go rescue Tweetums and stop the evil duo!”

They run off after Optimatus and Rupes.

kaejae · LUO's Next Top Poser

You sure you're not a Duxi shipper? ;)

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Ha! Ha! I thought this part would please a few Duxi shippers! But no, i myself am not a Duxi shipper. Really i was just trying to use Duck's Aqua-dense and Lexi's plant-control powers here, since they were a prominent change that occured in their powers in S2.

kaejae · LUO's Next Top Poser

I was hoping to see the others with new powers... :3 Here's to hoping for a season three!

Speaking of Duxi... I just heard a song on the new Maroon 5 album that's inspired to make Duxi art XD

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Yeah, i was kinda hoping to see the others discover new ways of using their powers too. Funny how Duck and Lexi were the only ones chosen to wield new powers, unless you count Ace discovering that his sword had powers too? To a season 3 indeed!

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Yes! They get to use their new powers again! Cool!

Yes....Chapter 4......how should I put it.....powerful. It was really good B_O! smile

And, Hear, hear! To a 3rd season of LU!

-- Edited by doggirl2772 at 19:06, 2007-05-25

Skifox · Frelengian

Ah, short n' sweet. Nice to see their powers getting them out of a jam. The ones that aren't inherently offensive are so underused.

To a third season! Cheers!

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

Duck had a clever idea! OMG! What a clever Duck! I love how this story is going! I love the story!

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Tech, Rev and Zadavia have their hands full back in Acmetropolis!

Chapter 5

Back in Acmetropolis, Tech, Rev and Zadavia are running from Deuce’s robots. Rev is flying above them whilst Tech and Zadavia are riding on Tech’s green hover-cycle. Tech is manoeuvring the hover-cycle around and dodging various laser blasts from the robots. Zadavia is sitting behind him and holding onto him tightly. Rev is also dodging in and out of laser blasts aimed at him in the air.

“Tech,-we-need-to-get-to-some-cover!” Rev shouts through his wrist communicator to Tech.

“Head for headquarters!” Tech shouts back. “We can use some of my equipment and weapons there to even up our odds!”

“Huh,-last-one-there’s-a-rotten-egg!” Rev jokes as he speeds off.

“Tech, look out!” Zadavia shouts pointing ahead.

Suddenly a robot trundles out from ahead of Tech and Zadavia, blocking their path. They let out shocked gasps. Tech wildly tries to turn the hover-cycle away from the robot, but the robot raises its arm weapon and prepares to fire on them. Then, just as it is about to fire a shot, the robot falls forward and hits the ground hard. A stunned Tech and Zadavia look up to see that it was Rev that had rammed the robot over. Rev grins at them and gives them a thumbs-up. Tech and Zadavia just smile back thankfully to him. They then proceed on to their HQ tower.

Once inside their HQs’ central control room, Tech runs to the control panels. Rev and Zadavia follow close behind him.

“Activating weapons targeting defence system.” Tech informs as taps away rapidly at the controls.

The holographic interface screens for the weapons system appear in the centre of the control room.

“Zadavia, you stay here where it’s safe and manually direct the weapons system.” Tech instructs to Zadavia.

“And what about you and Rev?” Zadavia questions.

“We’re going to do what we can against Deuce’s army.” Tech stoically replies.

“Tech,-we-could-try-out-those-new-enhancer-battle-suits-of-yours-that-you-designed-to-amplify-our-powers!” Rev excitedly suggests.

Tech smiles a wide smile. “You read my mind Rev.”

Outside the HQs, Deuce’s robots advance upon the Loonatics’ tower. Several panels on the head and neck of the tower open up to reveal various weapons. Inside the HQs control room, Zadavia runs her fingers along the holographic interface screens of the weapons control system. The weapons outside open fire on the robot army, destroying some of the robots on the first advancing line. From the ground entrance of the tower Tech and Rev emerge. They are dressed in black battle-suits with some additional hi-tech enhancement gear.

“Ready Rev?” Tech questions.

A green power indicator line charges up on Tech’s arm gear as he activates his suit.

“I-was-born-ready-buddy!” Rev enthusiastically replies.

A red power indicator line charges up on the side of Rev’s leg armour.

“Then let’s take out the trash!” Tech confidently rallies.

With that, the pair heroically charge toward the advancing robot army ahead. Rev takes off in a line of fire, running faster than he had ever done before in his life thanks to his suit’s power enhancement. He speeds from robot to robot, sticking magnetic time bombs on each robot he touches. A trail of exploding robots are left in his wake. Tech raises his hands up and activates his amplified electromagnetic powers. Several robots are encompassed in his green magnetic fields, and they are noisily crushed and bent into useless piles of scrap metal. Tech and Rev continue to take out as many of Deuce’s robots as they can with their amplified powers.

Kenny McCormick · Anthros

[Nice! I like where this is going! I especially liked the part when Tech smiled and said, "You read my mind, Rev." Hehehe...]

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Thanks! Yes, i thought Tech's "You read my mind" line was indicative of his unusual friendship with Rev and also, indirectly, of Rev's psychic-based GPS powers! He! He!

Kenny McCormick · Anthros

[Hehehe...Yeah, I thought so, too!]

[I have a question...Are you considering putting this on a fanfiction site? I'm sure that you'll get a lot of good reviews.]

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Yaaaayyy!!! Go Rev!! Go Tech!!! Destroy those buckets of bolts!!!! Yesssss!!! This dynamic duo can sure pack a punch!!! Yaaaaa!!

Whoo!! This is going amazing-stupendous-tremendous-....
Ace: In other words, your doin' great on the story so far B_O! smile

me: -nods vigurously- Yes, Yes. Very good. Very muchly so! More please! More-more-more!!!! biggrin

Ace: -facepalm- Please tell me you didn't eat m&m's today. blankstare

me: -smirks crazily- Well....let me put it this way. If I said that, I'd be lying. wink

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Oh noes! Doggirl's hyped up on M&Ms again! He! He!

And Kenny, i'm intending to post up this fic and another previous one on fanfiction.net at some point, don't know when tho', i'm just lazy at the moment!

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!! This story's getting more exciting everytime I read it! Keep up the good work B_O!

CassidyCoyote · Techie 4 life

HOORAY FOR TECH AND REV!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SMASH THOSE EVIL ROBOTS!!!!! *jumps up and down twirling green-and-red pom-poms*

Cassidy: Oh, no! Who gave her cheese again?

Rev: Well..... I-might-have.......

Cassidy: HOW MANY FLIPPIN' TIMES DO I HAVE TO TELL PEOPLE! DON'T FEED HER CHEESE!!!!

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

One gets hyper on M&Ms, the other on cheese...whoah!

Glad you're all quite excited about my last chapter!

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Ace: I think doggirl broke down. -points to doggirl-
me: -sitting stiffly in chair. eye twitching. hands shaking.-
Ace: did you run low on hyperness again?
me: -muttering in Rev paced speech- Dont feel good. Ran low on stories. Need good stories Can't live without good stories. Need good stories. Need em now. Like air. Cant live without air can you, well i need good stories. And sleep. Havent slept in, i dunno, hours now. And food. Sooooo hungry. Brains gunna explode. Too much studying. Too much info. Too much work. B...b..brain malfun...functioning. error...error..error....-boom!- -chair falls backwards-
Ace: weirdface

Uh.......

axelfar · Human

This story is so well writen. You have great talent!
Can't wait for the next chapter.

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

It's off to save the Royal Tweetums for Ace and co. now...or themselves!

Chapter 6

On Blanc, Ace and his group are flying after Optimatus and Rupes.

“Hurry gang! We have to stop Optimatus from reaching the centre of Blanc!” Ace urgently states.

“Don’t get your bunny ears in a twist Ace! Ole’ Opti-ma-tato won’t be able to use the royal sceptre!” Duck chuckles.

Ace and the others look at Duck curiously.

“Ugahrubleerah?” Slam asks confused.

Duck smiles mischievously, enjoying the attention he’s receiving. “Y’see, the sceptre needs ‘another piece’ to work.”

Duck holds up the pendant around his neck. “This. Tweetums gave it to me to look after when he knighted me. There’s a gem inside that needs to be placed in the sceptre in order to activate it.”

“Wow, and you actually kept it safe all this time?” Lexi comments in mild surprise. “I’m impressed! I didn’t think you could hold onto anything.”

“I-Hey!” Duck snaps in annoyance.

“Well it’s a good thing then that His Royal Highness prepared so well for emergencies, but we still have to rescue him and stop Optimatus and Rupes!” Ace states seriously. “And we can’t cross Deuce out of the picture yet. Tech, Rev and Zadavia’s dealing with him back in Acmetropolis, but he’s still at large.”

A determined expression paints Ace’s face.

Elsewhere, Optimatus and Rupes arrive at the wormhole generator central port on their hover-bikes. They dismount their rides on a long yellow pathway, Optimatus clutching the royal sceptre and Rupes dragging along a ball-shaped force-field prison containing a trapped, nervous Tweetums.

“At last, universal conquest is within my grasp!” Optimatus breathes.

“And my tune will be played in all the great Frelengian courts as the new national anthem!” Rupes adds gleefully.

Optimatus looks at Rupes in an annoyed fashion at his statement, but says nothing. He then raises the royal sceptre above his head.

“Royal sceptre, I command you to open the way to the wormhole generator core!” Optimatus booms.

Nothing happens. Optimatus shakes the sceptre in frustration.

“You’ll never get into the core chamber you bad man!” Tweetums challengingly informs. “The woyal sceptre won’t work without ‘another piece’!”

Optiamtus glares frighteningly down at Tweetums in his force-field prison, making the small bird back away in fear.

“Tell me what you know little canary, or I’ll crush the life out of your fragile tiny body!” Optimatus threatens.

“That’s no way to treat royalty!” comes Ace’s voice.

Optimatus and Rupes turn around to see Ace and his team.

Duck generates two fiery power orbs in his hands. “Drop the bird and come quietly and no-one gets hurt!”

Optimatus’ hand burns with his light energy and he points his glowing fingers at Tweetums. “No, you all surrender to me and I let the canary princeling live!”

“Don’t wisten to him!” Tweetums shouts out.

“Silence!” Optimatus booms at Tweetums.

Ace and his team look at Tweetums in concern. Optimatus growls and his hand flares brighter.

“Wait! Don’t hurt him!” Ace cries out. “We surrender.”

A satisfied smile spreads across Optimatus lips. “Wise decision bunny. Rupes, bind them!”

Rupes points his keyboard weapon at the Loonatics and fires a series of blue energy bands at them, tying their hands together.

“I don’t suppose you could let ‘me’ go?” Sylth appealingly asks. “Y’see, I’m not really with these do-gooders! I’m a bad cat at heart!”

“Coward!” Lexi calls to Sylth.

“Sorry kitty cat, but none of you leaves!” Rupes states crossing his arms smugly.

Optimatus turns back to Tweetums. “ Now tell me how to activate the royal sceptre canary!” he demands.

“You’ll get nothing out of me! This canawy won’t sing for you!” Tweetums defiantly replies.

Optimatus grits his teeth as he struggles to keep his temper in check. He turns to Ace and his team mates.

“Perhaps one of you can give me an answer!” he darkly says.

He advances up to Ace and stares dangerously into the bunny leader’s eyes. “Tell me what you know about the royal sceptre!”

“I’d rather eat doirt than help you in any way!” Ace replies defiantly as well.

Optimatus narrows his eyes at Ace’s response. Suddenly, he reaches for and grabs a hold of Lexi by her long ears. Lexi yelps in pain.

“Lex!” Ace cries out in panic.

“Talk! Or I may have to do something rather painful to your lovely friend here!” Optimatus threatens.

Optimatus tightens his grip on Lexi’s ears. Lexi lets out another short, sharp cry of pain.

“Optimatus stop! The sceptre needs a gem to work! And I have it in the pendant around my neck!” Duck shouts out in panic.

Optimatus looks at Duck then releases Lexi’s ears. She falls forward onto her knees, her face tightened as she tries to withstand the lingering pain in her sensitive ears. Ace runs to her side and kneels down by her in concern. Optimatus strides up to Duck, picks him up by the neck and swipes away his pendant with a pull, then drops him roughly to the ground again. Optimatus opens up the pendant and picks out a gem. He places the gem into the sceptre. The sceptre lights up and some distance ahead, a transparent bridge-way suddenly appears over an empty space, leading into the wormhole generator core chamber.

“Yeeessss!” Optimatus breathes in great satisfaction.

Ace and the others look on at the scene in dismay.