Yeow! Loads of emotion here! Great start kari but maybe a little work on your spelling could make it better. One thing.....do you really think that Zadavia would say those things to Duck? Or any of the others? 

me: Poor Duck, I know you warned Ace. You didn't mean for it to happen. They just were being very mean to you. -huggles duck-
Duck: Wait....your an acer right? Why are you hugging me?
me: Cause I feel bad and sorry for you. And Ace is hurt right now and I can't give him a hug now can I?
Duck: I'll take what I can get I suppose.

Oh and kari, I finished those movies you suggested. I just have to put them up on youtube. I'll add them to my video thread when they're up.

chapter 2:like father,like son

danger ran down the cold dark streets of acnetropolis,thunder sounded over head
as he ran into and ally and hide inside a box,rain pored down on the box soaking
him,he tried to forget what happened but somehow it could not leave his mind.

im so sorry thought danger as he buried his face in his hands

don't be said a voice,it was cold and mistafying

huh said danger as he stared at a duck sitting in frount of him

danger are you ok asked the duck,he was black like him,had green eyes and was
wering a green tee,blue jeans and white shoes.

who are you asked danger

you're father said the duck''athari duck''and he held out his hand

father asked danger as he took his hand and athari helped him up before letting go

yes my son said athari

now are you now an outcast asked athari

yes said danger

well then you need new clothes said athari and they walked down the streets together

well well i see my son fell for it thought athari smirking

end of chapter 2

reviwe

Very good. I liked how you described the picture I drew you.

chapter 4:the plan and saving

now son i have a plan said athari

shoot said danger

you need a new name said athari

hm..ok said danger''how about darien''

darien darien i like it said athari''now heres the plan''

5 min later..

ok got it said darien/danger

good now lets begin said athari walking out the door

in the streets by some building...

darien waited for the signel and saw the loonatics and zadavia and saw his father
attack them and then ninjas appered..

**** muttered darien

hey zadavia look out craid ace and zadavia got hit on the arm by a ninja
and blasted others.

HEY LEAVE HER ALONE WHATS SHE DONE TO YOU shouted darien loudly

what are you gonna do about it said a ninja and they grabbed zadavia by
her wrist

darien growled and walked to the ninja,he grabbed him by the scfuff of the neak
and threw him to the ground whitcj threw zadavia to the ground

uh said darien and he held out a hand to zadavia

thanks said zadavia and she took his hand and let go quikly

isnt he charming mutterd lexi

lex i don't trust him he could be trying to get at zadavia said ace

why would i do that asked darien staring at ace

uh no reason said ace and darien raised a eyebrow

ok muttered darien

anyway i gotta go said darien and he bowed to zadavia before leaving

end of chapter 4...

rewie

chapter 5:asking for a date

ha ha ha ha laughed darien as he walked to athari

what she was easy said athari

no you have a mustard stain on your head said darien

that's my hair growled athari and darien stopped laughing

ok whatever said darien as they sat down on a couch

anyway who was that chick asked athari''know her''

ya her name is zadavia she a princess of freeling''and he relized
he went too far

really asked athari''hm''

what asked darien as he stood up

asked her on a date said athari''and get to know her''

well i said darien blushing''i barley even know her''

thats the point of the plan said athari winking

but said darien as his father pushed him out the door

don't son i may have the guts to kill you said athari''now don't come back till you
get a date with zadavia''

ok ok said darien and he ran to the loonatics hq

at hq...

ace and lexi were playing pool,slam was raiding the fridge,tech was building
something and rev was running around hq,zadavia was reading a love book.

KNOCK KNOCK...

hm said zadavia and she ansewed the door as the loonatics looked up
in interest...

uh hi said darien smiling

uh hi said zadavia''what are you doing here''

uh well i wanna ask you on a date said darien calmly,he was blushing too!

wha well i uh sure said zadavia,also blushing

cool so i will pick u up at 7 asked darien

sure said zadavia''by the way im zadavia''

im darien said darien''uh anyway later ok''and he walked out of hq,
leaving both of them with a heat beating at a millon miles per hour

end of chapter 5

reviwe...

have the next chapter up soon

-- Edited by kari bunny at 19:41, 2007-07-01

chapter 6: A Date And An Attack

hm said darien as he looked into a mirror,he was in a black jacket,he had a
white butten up shirt underneath,he had black pants on and black shoes,his
hair remaind the same.

go now growled athari and he pushed him out the door

fine snapped darien

at hq...

zadavia was in a spakiling blue dress that went to her ankles,she had black
1 inch high heals on,her hair was down and there was a red flower at the side
of her hair.

KNOCK KNOCK

thats darien squealed lexi with happiness(god lexi starting to sound like
serena from sailer moon he he)

ya said zadavia and she opened the door to find darien

hi said darien smiling warmly

uh well uh hi said zadavia,her face was slightly pink

anyway shall we go said darien offering his arm

yes said zadavia and she took his arm

i hate him thought ace and he walked to his room

at the beach..

thought you might like this place said darien as they walked around

well its is beutifull said zadavia

ya you are said darien looking at her

what said zadavia and he smiled

anyway were are you from asked darien

freling said zadavia

hm i heard about that place did it go into some war or
something asked darien

ya started by my brother said zadavia

ouch said darien

what about you're family asked zadavia

i never had one well i did but they left me cause of a war said darien

really said zadavia smiling

ya said darien''they still contact me though''

ya said zadavia and darien looked with fear

what said zadavia and he swung her protecting her with his body as
a long sharp blade grazed his sholder.

darien said zadavia

im ok said darien smiling and he blacked out

end of chapter 6

reviwe

okay......

1. Oh....mah....gawd......
2. Oh No! Duck, I mean, Darien!
3. Awwww.....Ace is feeling left out.