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All right this is my first fan fiction so pleas be truthfull, but gental.

 

My little Secret.

 

Chapter1: Odd

 

Its a normal day in Acmetropalic, with people going about there normal responsibility.

At the Loonatics Headquarters, they to are going about there normal morning routeen. Duck was siting upside down on the couch, filliping through the channels, seeking for any thing good. Rev was playing air hockey agents himself. Slam was raiding the frig. Ace was meditating. Tech was fiddling about with a few parts of mashenary.

 

Lexi was no ware to be seen. The others jest thought that she was still asleep. All though its was strange of her to sleep in like she was. The clock said 9:43, and still no Lexi. Tech had commented that maybe one of them should go see if Lexi was felling all right, for it was unlike her to sleep this late. Ace volunteered got up and made his way down the hall to the bedrooms.

 

As Ace came up to her door he heard the sound of either the radio or television. It wasn't Lexis usual music, but rather it was the sound of people talking and it was most definitely a recording of some kind. Ace found it bit odd but ignored it.

 

Hay Lexi.” Ace said as he taped his fist agents the metal door. The first thing he heard was the tv or radio being terned off. Thin the sound of her moving stuff.

 

Um.....who is it?” Lexis voice rang out from the door.

 

It me, Ace.” He stated. Lexi came out quickly and closed the door be hind her so Ace couldn't see what was in side.

 

Hay Ace whats up?” she said in a semi normal way. Ace gave her a questionus look. He notesed she was not in her uniform, but rather a tight gray spaghetti strap shirt and blue jeans with a tear in the right knee.

 

Ace tried not to stare at her body, but her outfit was rather reveling. And she was a girl and he was a boy.

 

We all where jest wondering if you where feelin' ok, dats all.” Ace said.

 

Why would you guys be wondering if I was feeling ok?” Lexi asked him.

 

Well for one you've bin cooped up in your room for quit a wile and its already 9:51, and you haven't bin up. We thought you mite be sick.” Ace stated.

 

Its 9:51?” Lexi asked as she grabbed Aces arm to read what time it was on his built in watch, she was truly surprised at the time, “sorry, I was um...um...listening to a story on the radio, ya the radio, and I must of lost track of time, I'll be out soon. I, I promise.

 

All right.” Ace started to walk down the hall, giving a quick look back in Lexi only to be met with a smile, he didn't believe her when she said she was listening to the radio.

 

All Ace could think was how odd that was of Lexi.

 

Lexi went back into her room, she lend on the door and let out a sigh.

 

I wish I didn't have to lie to him.” She said pushing her fingers through her blond hare. She pushed off the wall and walk over to a small television in her room. She pressed a button and out popped a video. She took it out and put it back in it case. On the case where written the words 'My little Secret'.

 

Lexi sighed agen and placed the video in a black metal box next to some other videos, a pitcher book, a couple of other misalliances items, and a small hand made rabbit stuff animal. She shut the box and with a small key and lock, locked it. She put the box in brown trunk she had, and set the key in a small jewelery box.



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[...]

[...No offense, but please learn how to spell.  I had a very hard time reading this due to the fact that I couldn't understand at least half of the words you were using.  I found too many errors, so I stopped reading halfway through.]

[For example, you misspelled "Machinery".  (You wrote "Mashenary"...)  It took me a while to understand what the word was.  You also misspelled "Against".  (You wrote "Agents"...)  This took me even longer to understand what the word was supposed to be.  There are a lot more errors, but I'm not going to name them.]

[I hate to be mean, but if you want to write at least decent fanfiction, you must learn how to spell.  Nobody is going to want to read the story if they can't understand most of the words.]

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Kenny I understood the story and to me It seems very interesting.

And Kenny no offense to you, but theres a big differents on giving helpfull cridasisam and makeing one fell like an ideot. (If you can't say something nice, DON'T say any thing at all)

BlackCat I like your story, yes you do need to practice your spelling a bit, may I sugest you keep a Dictionary around. (or spell chek).

Don't give up and keep wrighting!!

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Thank Siamese, and yes I'll see to geting a Dictionary I can cary around. It probly would help me but what can I say I'm terable speller. I guess it dousen't help that I'm 13 dous it?

Mabe I should hold off on the story for awille. Man I was so scared to post this story, mabe I should lisen to my older sister and quit the chat sites. Whats the point of joining chat bords and chanals if no one can understand me. Right?

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Siamese712 wrote:

Kenny I understood the story and to me It seems very interesting.

And Kenny no offense to you, but theres a big differents on giving helpfull cridasisam and makeing one fell like an ideot. (If you can't say something nice, DON'T say any thing at all)




[The story seemed like an interesting concept to me as well.]

[I recognize that my criticism wasn't the nicest that it could have been, but I'm not trying to make anyone feel like an idiot.  But what I really want for this writer to do is to read over what they write and make corrections.]

[I know that everyone makes mistakes, but misspelling a lot of words in a story is not that tolerable.  The mistakes make it hard for some people to read, and, although the story may have a good concept, some readers might lose interest in it.]

[Although it may seem that I'm trying to make BlackCat feel bad, I'm really not.  All I'm trying to do is remind them that, later in life, you can't make that many spelling errors in your stories.  I'm not kidding.]

[Oh, and no offense to you, Siamese712, but you need to learn how to spell, too.]

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Kenny McCormick wrote:
[Oh, and no offense to you, Siamese712, but you need to learn how to spell, too.]

 



Hay non taken I know I'm a crapy spell. blankstareThats why I keep a Dictionary with me when ever  I'm wrighting a story or papesmiler (that or I make sure someone who can spell is in the roombiggrin)

Hay I jest got an idea! Maybe Kenny you can help BlackCat!! Sens your a good spell BlackCat could send you  a cappter in advans you do spelling corections and send it back to B-C

I mean it has to be okay with you bolth first.



-- Edited by Siamese712 at 18:44, 2007-08-06

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BlackCat wrote:

Thank Siamese, and yes I'll see to geting a Dictionary I can cary around. It probly would help me but what can I say I'm terable speller. I guess it dousen't help that I'm 13 dous it?

Mabe I should hold off on the story for awille. Man I was so scared to post this story, mabe I should lisen to my older sister and quit the chat sites. Whats the point of joining chat bords and chanals if no one can understand me. Right?





[Hehe...Um...]

[You don't need to quit the message board if you can't spell.  Just try to look up words that don't look like they're spelled correctly.]

[As for writing stories...You may need a beta-reader.  I'm sure that some people on this message board are willing to be a beta-reader for you, and that includes me.]

[As for your age, that's understandable...But I have an online friend who is younger than you (Not by much), and he spells a little better than I do.  He was raised differently, I guess.]

[Keep writing; don't give up.]

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So Kenny your saying your willing to do spelling corections for me?

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[*Shrugs*]

[I guess so.]

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cool I'll send you chappter 2

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Chapter2: Where Does She Go?


“Hey, guys! I'm headin' out!” Lexi called as she headed for the exit.


“Headin' out?  Where are you goin'?” Duck yelled. Lexi walked back to the main room. She was wearing the same out-fit that Ace had seen her in earlier, with the exception of a brown leather jacket and pink sneakers.


“It’s Friday, Duck. You guys know I go out on Fridays.” She said to everyone in the room. Unlike what most people believed, the Loonatics did go out; they all had their own social life away from each other and away from work. And almost ever since she joined the Loonatics, she went out on Friday. She would leave early in the morning and come home rather late at night.


“Well, I got my communicator so you guys can contact me, so I'll be going. Bye, see you later.” She waved to them and then ran out.


“See ya, Lex.


“Bye,-Lexi.


“Have fun.”

A few of her friends said their farewells as she ran out. Ace sat there on the couch, pondering on what had happened earlier.


'Why was she acting so weird this morning?' Ace thought to himself.


“Hey, guys, have you ever wondered where Lexi goes every Friday?” Ace asked the others.


“I don't know....We could follow her if you'd like.” Duck commented with a grin.


“Duck! We’re not going to go follow her. She deserves a social life. I was just wondering if any of you knew where she goes?” Ace said.


All the guys looked at each other as they gathered around the couch; none of them knew. Lexi had never told one of them in the three years that they worked together.


Tech set down the gears, “You know, Ace, now that I think about it, I don't think she’s ever told any of us.


“Thats-really-odd-for-Lexi-because-she-tells-at-least-one-of-

us-everything,-and-it’s-kinda-funny-that-we-never-

noticed-this-before.” Rev said.


“Indeed.” Tech agreed.


“Mabe Lexi goseeingsomeone fiyday.” Slam grumbled.


“You think Lexi is going out to see some one every Friday?  Ace asked Slam.


“Whysurwhynot?


“Slam is right you know. Lexi could be going out to meet someone, or go some place; it’s hard to tell.” Tech said.


“Well, when she gets back, I'm asking her where she goes. Hopefully I'll get an answer.” Ace commented.

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Ps. I mid as well say this story is a bit on the Acexi-ish sideaww



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nice second chappter...Hum... wounder whare Lexi keeps going?

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Yes were does she keep going?Anyway good story blackcat.

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aw thanks guys. and...um...Kari I'm not that new any more, I'v bin hear for about a month. But thank you all the same

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Apolagising early for spelling erors 


Chapter3: Midnight Chat

 

Ace was siting on the couch watching a late night show when Lexi came home. All the other loonatics where asleep. Ace terned the volume down on the television as he heard th door hiss open and close. Lexi came in humming a little toon.

 

Hay Lex.” Ace called over to her.

 

Huh?” Lexi looked over to see Ace, she smiled at him, “What are you doing up this late?

 

Jest watching a late night show.” Ace said. Lexi walked over to him taking off her jacket, and laying it over her arm.

 

I thought most channels stopped playing shows at midnight, and its what....12:40 now?”She said as she sat down next to him.

 

I guess I got lucky,” Ace said in casual fashion, “Hay Lexi?

 

Mm?

 

Where do you go every Friday?”Ace asked looking up at her.

 

Oh hear and there.” Lexi said try not to get eye contact.

 

Would you really consider dat an answer?” Ace asked.

 

You know, I-I don't know. I think I'm going to go to bed.” Lexi started to get up only to be stopped by the feeling of Aces hand set gently on her shoulder.

 

Lexi, why are you lieing to me?” Ace said sternly.

 

Lexis blood ran cold, heart betted fast. Douse he know? She thought. Being the quick thinker she was, Lexi was easily able to put on a show.

 

What makes you think I'm lieing?!” Lexi said sound defensive and angry. As she glared at Ace and shrugged his hand off her shoulder.

 

W-well I was jest-” Ace spluttered.

 

Ace if you must know about my personal life then fine! I go to random places. The Library, a disco, the moves.” Lexi said in a quiet yell, “And to answer your next question, yes I go alown. Why would you think I would lie to you?!

 

Lexi grabbed her jacket from the couch and briskly walked turds the hallway. Jest be for she diapered from Aces site she terned her head and said

 

Don't accuse me of lieing when I don't have a reason to

 

Ace sat there, a little dumbfounded, Lexi never jest snapped at him like that. Yes she had yelled at him before, but never like that. Usually if he said something like that she would make herself sound heart, but that was mad. Real mad.

 

Ace sighed and kinda slapped his fore head. He felt like an ideate and a jerk. He looked over at where Lexi was sitting. He notesed two small peaces of paper, he piked them up and read what they said. He thin was confused.

 

What they where, where two movie ticket stubs to the new move 'Legend of the River'. A movie for all ages.

 

'She did lie to me!' Ace thought, 'Lexi said that she gos alown. Why would she lie?......The better question is who did she go with, and why keep it a secret?'

 

Ace felt a pain in side.

 

Lexi with or with out your cooperation I'm gonna find out what your up to, and why you've lied to me.” Ace whispered.



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Oooh... Now this is getting serious. Nice third chapter. I think Ace should keep out of Lexi's business and not be bothered by it. But it's your story and only you can decided the fate of the Loonatics. Keep up the good work.

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[...Err...You never sent me the chapter to correct the errors...]

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I didn't? i thought I did I remember sending the post.
it must be my computer, Its bin glichen out on me.

-- Edited by BlackCat at 10:31, 2007-08-10

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[Well, try to send me the next chapter.]

[But I like this story so far.  Keep it up.]

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Hmm, why would Lexi lie to Ace?
I agree with A-cat, Ace should but out.
But thin agen i wish to know what Lexis up to.
Good chappie B-Cat

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A-Cat: Thank you, and yes this is geting sereus. Who knows what Lexis doing(well I know of cors)

Siamese: Well maybe Ace should stay out og her bissnes, but thin again. Thank you

Kenny: I sent the next chapter, tell me if it dosin't make it. And thank you as well.



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[...Uh...I only got what looks like half of a chapter.]

[Is your computer working correctly?]

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okay kenny did it end with, Ace ordered the mallard?
'cos thats where its sopost to end.

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[No, it ended with "Duck teased".]

[...Is it my computer or yours?  I can't tell.]

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You guys are having problems with your computers? wow tuff brak. I dont know what I would do if My computer failed.

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Ace: My heart is yours. Now and forever

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Ace: I'm more of the flying by the seat of my pants guy
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Kenny McCormick wrote:

[No, it ended with "Duck teased".]

[...Is it my computer or yours?  I can't tell.]




IDK, I'll try sending you the rest of the story.hmm
And get my father to look at my computeraww



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Very good so far aww, I have a small theroy on the two tickets, but ain't gonna say As I fear I got it right XD.

Computer glitching? My PC always glitches, maybe it's all the modifications I made to it, oh well



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Pretty good fanfic, Blackcat. I noticed that there were ALOT of spelling errors there, no offense. Try to correct them next time, 'kay? :)

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DJ_TDI_411 wrote:

Pretty good fanfic, Blackcat. I noticed that there were ALOT of spelling errors there, no offense. Try to correct them next time, 'kay? :)




[...If you were paying attention, you would have noticed that I've become Blackcat's Beta-Reader.]

[...Err...Blackcat, are you going to send me the rest of the chapter?]

[Edit:  The only reason chapters one and three have errors are:  I didn't have access to chapter one, and chapter three never got sent to me.  Well, chapter three was sent, but I never got it.]

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Blackcat, this is pretty good for your first story, except for the spelling errors. But since Kenny's gonna be your Beta-reader, I guess that's okay.

Just something I want to point out: hitting or slapping your forehead is called a 'facepalm.'

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Luc I'd love to read your theroy, but if you did get it right thin it would be a bit of a spoiler wouldin't it?

DJ thank you, I know I'm a bad speller. Its okay though for I luckaly got a bada-reader.

Daphane thank you. oh, I didn't know facepalm ment a slapp. I knew it had to del with puting your face into the hand I didn't know it was a slapp.

And GERRRR, I did send the rest of the chapter to you kenny. *sighe* I'll try agen.

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[Okay, I finally got the rest of chapter four.]

[I'll correct the errors soon.]

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All right FINALY Chapter4biggrin


Chapter 4: Partners

Ace walked down the hallway and stopped in front of Lexi’s door. She was in the training room and wouldn't return for a while. Ace figured now would be a good time as any to get answers for the questions he had brewing last night. He placed a hand on the door.


“I wish I didn't have to do dis, but what if Lexi is in some trouble, or gets into some kind of trouble? Then what would we do?” He sighed and pushed the button to open the door. There was a small beep, but no motion.


“Drat! Locked. Looks like I'll need to try the other way.” Ace said quietly.


There where only three ways to get into a locked door at Loonatics Headquarters. One:  a personal key card;  Two: a number code; or Three: Tech’s key card to all the rooms. Ace didn't have Lexi’s personal key card, or Tech’s, so random number codes were the only way to go. He started typing random codes, none of which seemed to work.


“What are you doing, Ace?”


Ace turned around to see Duck standing there, an eyebrow raised in suspicion. Ace didn't know what to do.


“Why are you trying to get into Lexi’s room?” Duck asked, suspicious.


“I wasn't!” Ace claimed. Duck gave him a look that sarcastically said 'Yeah, I believe you'.


Ace let out an annoyed sigh. “Okay, if I tell you what I'm doing, will you promise not to tell the guys, and especially not Lexi?”

Duck thought for a second, then nodded.

“All right. Remember yesterday I said I was going to ask Lexi where she goes on Fridays? Well when I asked her at first she didn't give me a straight answer and tried to ignore the question altogether. Den when I tried to get a real answer she.....snapped and yelled at me.”


“HA! It’s nice to see her taking her anger out on someone else for a change!” Duck teased.


“Whatever, Duck.  Now as I was sayin', she told me she goes to random places and that she goes alone, but if she goes alone why did I find these where she was sitting?” Ace handed Duck the two movie ticket stubs.


“If she goes alone then why would she have two?” Duck asked.


“That’s my question. Who is she going with and why is she lyin'? So what if she gets into trouble because of who, or wherever she’s going?  ....That’s why I'm trying to get into Lexi’s room to see if I can get some answers. I know it’s probably not right to sneak into her room, but she won't tell me what’s goin' on.” Ace explained.


Duck nodded slowly, thinking of what Ace said. “All right, Ace. I believe you and I'm willing to help.”


“What?


“As much as I hate to admit, and I'm going to deny I ever said this, but Lexi is our good friend, and we need to know if she’s getting into trouble, and to stop any trouble if possible. She’d do the same for any of us.


“Wow, Duck, I've never heard you sound so concerned about someone else.” Ace said as he returned to the key pad. He typed in another combination, only to hear the ‘access denied’ beep.


“Hey, Duck, you think you can quack us in there?”  Ace asked


“Sure can, Ace.” Duck grabbed Ace’s arm and the next thing they knew, they were in Lexi’s bedroom.



“Okay, Duck, look around for anything out of the ordinary.” Ace ordered the mallard.



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I don't like Ace going in to Lexis room, but he dous have a point. If shes in truble they should know. But still, infading her room.

Good chapter B-Cat

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no.gif Ace never gives up does he? And sending Duck in there was a dirty tatic. And should Lexi find both of them in her room, sparks are gonna fly...

aww Keep up with the good work though.

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Well done,BlackCat, your fan fiction is great.
If Lexi find that Ace and Duck was in her room,she will doing or thinking what?

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Aw thanks guys.

Ya useing Duck is a dirty tatic A-Cat, but like Siamese said thay got to know if shes geting into truble.

Thank you all. Hears a bit of chappter5
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“Ace I don't think we're going to fined any thing. I vote we get out of hear before Lexi gets back.” Duck wined.

“Jest keep looking Duck. There has to be something.” Ace said. Ace walked over to the corner of the room. On the floor he saw a small cared bored box and lid, rapping-pappier leaning agents the wall, a small hand made rabbit stuff-animal with a long cat like tail, and a small tag. Ace picked up the tag and read what it said.
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Hay kenny did you get the next chappter?
I sent it.

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[You sent the chapter?  I'm still waiting for it.]

[I had my computer checked, too.  Nothing is wrong with my computer.]

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Nothing seems to be wrong with my computer.
*sighe*
I'll try seending it AGEN!!

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[Ok, I finally got the chapter.]

[I'll edit it as soon as I can; I'm helping an online friend write her story.  And by helping, I mean giving her ideas.  If I can get her and my other online friend to join this message board, it would be awesome.]

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OOOOhhhhh, interesting teser B-Cat.

i wounder what that tag reads?

(tuff break on the computer problems)

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Chapter5: Spark?

 

The two looked all around, they checked jacket an pants pockets for any kinda reset. Drowse and boxes for maybe a photograph. They jest came up empty handed, and they where running out of time.

 

Ace I don't think we're going to fined any thing. I vote we get out of hear before Lexi gets back.” Duck wined.

 

Jest keep looking Duck. There has to be something.” Ace said. Ace walked over to the corner of the room. On the floor he saw a small cared bored box and lid, rapping-pappier leaning agents the wall, a small hand made rabbit stuff-animal with a long cat like tail, and a small tag. Ace picked up the tag and read what it said.

 

'Happy Birthday Spark, With lots of Love, '

 

All it was missing was Lexis signature. As Ace slipped the tag in his back pocket Duck had opened a brown trunk and pulled out a locked black metal box.

 

Hay Ace I think I mite have found some thing.” Duck called over to Ace. Ace came over to where Duck was crouched down holding the box. Ace tugged on the lock hoping it to pop off, but it instead was being resistant.

 

Whys it locked?” Ace asked in general. The two stood up looking down at the box.

 

You know, Ace. Most people who have a black box usually keep there biggest secret in side.” Duck said.

 

Hm, I wounder if it has something to do with this Spark person. ” Ace said

 

Spark?” Duck asked. Ace handed him the tag.

 

Jest thin they heard foot steps coming up the hall and stopping at the door.

 

Ah! Thats Lexi quick hide in da closet.” Ace said as the two rushed into the closet to hide.

 

Lexi walked in to her room with a pink towel in her hand. She whipped her forehead off and placed the towel in a dirty laundry hamper next to the door. She looked around the room almost emediately notesed the box.

 

'Thats it where dun for.' Ace thought to himself

 

I thought I put this away.” Lexi said as she piked up the box and pleased it on the dresser, “I must of jest thought I did.

 

'okay, not so dun for'

 

She walked over to the corner where the box and toy still lay on the ground. She set the stuff-animal in the box and put the lid on.

 

I hope Spark likes this. Eh, he always enjoys what I get him for his birthday.” With the box in hand she walked back over to the dresser and got out a key from the jewelery box, “Although I think I'm his favorite gift. After all I barely get to spend time with him, and on his birthday we get to spend a lot more time together thin any other day.

 

She unlocked the black box, placed the gift inside, relocked it, and put it back inside the trunk. She placed the key in her pocket, and walked over to get the rapping-paper. Both Duck and Ace froze as she came tords the closet. She opened the door slightly and set the paper in side, not notesing the two who hid inside.

 

Lexi then walked out of her room. Ace and Duck let out sighs of relief, and exited the closet.

 

Dat was a closes one.” Ace said.

 

You said it.” Duck replied, “Spark? Who's he, and what dos he have to do with Lexi?

 

Dats what we need to fined out,Duck.



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ace and duck nearly got caught lol...good chapter...

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So Lexi has a little black box, and keeps a toy inside.
Interesting....Good chapter B-cat

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Thanks you 3.
I hope to have the next chapter up soon

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Oooo ooo, I know I know! Spark is mhmhmmhmh.

Tessa: -Hand still over my mouth- You are going to do exactly what Akira is doing, understood?

Me: -gulps and nods-

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Chapter6: Spying

 

Are you ready Duck?” Ace asked the black mallard.

 

I guess. I don't see how you can truly be ready to stock your friend.” Duck simply replied.

 

The week had loped and it was ones agen Friday. Through out the week both Ace and Duck had tried to use sudle ways of getting Lexi to tell them what she was up to, but she every time they asked a question she easily replied as if nothing was up. Now the duo where waiting for there female friend to leave headquarters, and fallow her to where ever shed be going.

 

Ace was wearing a yellow tee wile Duck wore a orange one. Both wearing blue jeans. Lexi exited HQ, wearing a lose fitting pink tee and old looking blue jeans, and walked down the street into Acmetropalic. Duck and Ace waited by HQ until Lexi had gained some distends.

 

All right Duck let jet” Ace said as the two walked some distends behind Lexi.

 

They fallowed her deeper into the heart of the city, every so often hiding from Lexi as she glanced behind herself. She jerned down into the tunnels of the subway station that ran its way beneath the city.


Why would Lexi be going down to the subway?” Duck asked Ace as they hid at the corner of a building. Witnessing Lexi go down the steppes to the subway.


I don't know Duck. Come on let head down der.” Ace said as they to went down under the street.


They saw Lexi siting on a bench at one of the stops. She looked up at a clock on the wall, 7:34 AM. She looked down at the ground real fast and stood up. As she stood up one of the subways under ground trains arrived.


She tried to see over the hustling people who where getting in and out the subway train. Duck and Ace where all so trying to keep Lexi with in there site. As the amount of people started to dwindle one more steeped out of the subway train. It was a female, bunny, anthro.


She was about the same hight as Lexi and had the same fur and eye color. She, how ever, had black night hair rather thin Lexis golden sun hair. She was wearing leather pants, a gray tee, and across her shoulder was a small pink pack. One of her ears stood up and the other hung low over her face. She looked up and smiled at Lexi, Lexi smiled back.


Hay Zo.” Lexi greeted the other anthro with a hug.


Hay Lex. Hows things?” This Zo asked.


Same o, same o, in the super hero bizz.” Lexi looked around them real fast, “Wheres-


Hes still asleep.” She interrupted Lexi, “He got to exsided last night and couldn't fall asleep.


Will he ever learn?”


Um, I'd say no. Hes to much like his mom.” Zo seemed to teas. Lexi giggled.


Well thats true. Come on lets get some breakfast then go get him.” Lexi said as they walked off.


When Lexi and Zo where a little distant Ace and Duck came out of there hiding spot.


Ace, do you think this other person they where talking about is Spark?” Duck asked his leader.


Most likely, Duck, but who is dis other goil? Come on.” Ace replied as they ones again proseded with spying on there good friend.



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