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Don't... ask... X3

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I hate to sound like a prudish party killer at this point, but I'd like the comments in this thread to waver down in general unless the comments themselves are at least somewhat constructive and on topic. As much as I hate being a bitch like this, it's been almost 80 comments since the last chapter was posted, which is a tad excessive.

Oh, and about the next chapter... I'm SORRY I'm so late with it D: Life he gotten to me in the last few days... tomorrow I prommissseee D=

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I'll wait but not for long.

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I'm sooo sorry it took so long. D: But good news, it's here! Celebrate good times!



Chapter 18: The Ministry of Lost Souls

“My dream’s but a drop of fuel for a nightmare.”


Never before had two sentences made so much of an impact on the team. Ace instinctually started screaming at the top of his lungs.

“Team, gather around the conference table, now!”

Luckily, most of the team were already either near or currently occupying the table. Only Slam was away – snacking in the kitchen – but he was out shortly. The five stood around in a circle, looking extremely tense. Rev, Lexi and Slam awaited to hear news as to what exactly was going on that would cause such an abrupt meeting.

“Guys, they got Duck. I don’t know who ‘they’ is, but they’ve got him. Somewhere near the Acme orphanage. We have to get there in ten minutes or… I don’t wanna think about what will happen. Obviously the guy’s not gonna just hand him over just cause we show up, so be ready for intensive combat. Acme Orphanage. Let’s jet!”

“Wait, what do I do?” cried a female voice from a short distance away. Shannon stood offside the group with a demeanor of both confusion and fear. She had evidently been in the kitchen with Slam getting the proper nourishment needed after weeks of exile.

“Shannon, there’s a high-security fallout room about seven floors down. I’d advise you to go down there and hang low for a while. Its more than likely that any fight that may ensue won’t make its way back here, but it’s not out of the possibility. So it’s probably the safest route to take,” Tech replied dryly.

“Got it,” Shannon said quickly, not wanting to hold the team up any longer than she had to, and she made her way to the elevator.

“Okay, team, let’s jet already!” And without further interruption, the team kicked off their jetpacks, or in Rev’s case, held out their arms, and they were off.

The venture towards the orphanage wasn’t exactly a long trip – perhaps only three or four blocks away from Headquarters – but the five’s nerves were so wracked that the flight was prolonged into a treacherous journey through pressure. They dreaded their arrival, but it couldn’t come soon enough. When they did arrive, what they saw really startled them.

Nothing.

There was not a single sound, a single life form outside of the orphanage or a sight of anything suspicious; only a cool, foreboding breeze.

In spite of this, the five of them stuck it out. This is, after all, where they were told explicitly to arrive, and they were well within the given time limit, since their destination wasn’t very far from the start. And yet, there was no sign of anything. Ace began to wonder if they had been duped.

“Hmm, I don’t know what’s going on here, guys. It’s so quiet. I don’t like it. Rev, Lexi - go look for any signs of the kidnappers on the backside of the building. Tech, Slam - stick around the front here. I’ll keep a lookout from afar, and buzz you if I see anything fishy.”

The others nodded in agreement and split up accordingly.

“Come on, Slam,” Tech said, “let’s start on the left side over here – there’s a lot of nooks and crannies around.”

“Grrbblb gotcha,” Slam confirmed, and the two set off on what seemed like a pointless search.

The two scanned the parameters of the building, observing each little angle and corner until they practically memorized the entire section of the building. Since there was nothing else to look out, Tech quickly took to looking inside the windows of the orphanage.

Window one: a small, confining room filled to the brim with unorganized paperwork. It must have been nearly impossible to get anything done in there.

Window two: a very bland, gray office with a solitary table in the center. There weren’t even any chairs. Perhaps they should move some of the papers from the previous room onto that table.

Window three: a rather spacious, roomy office space, festively decorated and complete with 2 couches, a computer, a television, and a packed bookcase. Must be the owner’s office, Tech thought. It juxtaposed oddly with the rest of the building’s dingy nuance.

Window four: the biggest room yet. But, judging by its occupants, not nearly big enough. Around fifty or sixty kids populated the relatively small, gray room lit with ordinary fluorescent lights. Tech gazed into this window for a particularly long time. Most of the children were humans, but there were a few anthromorphs here and there as well, particularly a dog, two cats, a wolf, a hare, and a baby roadrunner.

There were a few toys scattered around the room – not nearly enough for everyone, but even so, they lay largely ignored. The kids talked, teased or played amongst themselves or otherwise sat in solitude. This had to be a miserable existence, or at least an unfulfilling one, Tech though. It was practically a ministry for lost souls. For perhaps the first time, Tech felt sympathy for Duck. It had to be hard growing up in a place like this.

Duck – that’s right, the team was searching for Duck. Tech shook his head, realizing he had just wasted a good chunk of time and held Slam up as well, since he followed Tech’s every move. He began to set off once again when a voice from behind unexpectedly met his ears.

“Pitiful little buggers, aren’t they?”

Tech and Slam jumped in surprise and turned around. There stood a well-built man with smooth, long black hair. He held a burlap sack in his left hand that looked quite heavy.

Tech started up. “And you are –“

“Likely the man you’re looking for, yes,” the stranger finished. “And, no worries, I know quite well who you two are. But where are the other three? I explicitly asked that all five of you be present.”

Tech looked down, pressed a button on his arm gauntlet and spoke into a mouthpiece. “Rev, Lexi, Ace, we found the guy. On the side of the building facing our tower. Come quick.” He terminated the transmission.

Slam stood closely beside Tech, resembling a gigantic, scared puppy. He had no idea what would happen, or what he should do.

“Ah, these awkward silences always get to me,” the stranger spoke, “so, how about this weather?”

“And would that be Duck in the sack?” Tech asked curtly.

“My, you’re not one for icebreakers, are you? Maybe your friends will have more manners, and, ah, here they come now.”

The other three dashed into the clearing, and now formed a pentagon surrounding the longhaired man with the burlap sack.

“Lovely, you’re all here. It doesn’t look like I’ll have to kill this mallard after all,” the man said.

“Look, let’s cut the crap, doc, and get to the heart of the matter. What do you want from us?”

“Nuh uh uh, my harried hare. Remember that the fate of the duck is still in my hands. Well, my left hand, specifically,” he held up the sack, “so, if you don’t mind, I’d like to get things started at the rate of my own choosing.

“First of all, I haven’t introduced myself! I’m Vincent Cavanagh, the humble son of famous human rights activist James Cavanagh. You see, I want to follow in his footsteps, and I’m afraid you lot are getting in the way of the progression of human rights.”

The five present exchanged odd looks at this statement, but then Vincent went on.

“Now, observe, we’re gathered here today because of this fellow.” Vincent untied the rope bounding the sack, and flipped it over to empty out the contents. Duck inhumanely and rather grotesquely came tumbling out, clearly unconscious and bound by ominously green-glowing rope. He laid lamely on the ground.

The five recoiled at the sight. Lexi gasped, “is he… dead?”

“No, silly. I’ve already made it clear that he is not dead… yet. You see, this rope here is yet another brilliant creation of my brother’s. Good ol’ Danny – you’ll meet him soon. Anyway, each fiber of the rope is laced with copious amount of benzodiazepines, which are powerful sleeping agents. In addition to that, the fibers themselves are chemically altered to attach to anything tangible and warm. Since the duck is clearly tangible and warm, all of those fibers are sticking into him right now, and transmitting benzodiazepines into his nervous system. So long as he is bound in there, he’s out like a light. Even better, the rope can only be removed with an extremely specialized chemical solution, which only my brother has. Ah, there’s the genius now.”

Approaching from Vincent’s left, Dan walked into the scene out of seemingly nowhere. Tech couldn’t help but wonder how these two were managing to appear out of thin air.

Dan’s presence was far less daunting than Vincent’s was; in fact, he looked like a stereotypical geek, with huge glasses, short hair and a lab coat. He also did not have the confidence his brother held - if anything, he looked nervous.

“Anyway, that’s Dan. Dan, everybody. Poor guy, he’s mute. Anyway, back to the situation at hand. Now, you see I could easily just take Dan’s solution and unbind the duck here and let him free unscathed so you can all go back to your little happy places. But I’m afraid you’re going to have to fulfill one teensy request of me.”

“Oh yeah?” said Ace skeptically. “And what’s that?”

“Step down as ‘guardians of Acmetropolis’,” Vincent said bluntly, “end this silly little charade, and let man run his own world.”

“And just let you take over everything?!” Lexi snapped back.

“I can assure you, miss, I have absolutely no intentions of doing anything of the sort. Power and wealth are of little importance to me. I come only in the intention of preserving man’s power in a world he created. You six are a clear obstacle to this. So, please, step down and I’ll let the duck go.”

Ace was in disbelief. “Is that really what this is all about?” he asked, “you have a problem with us because we’re not… human?”

“Bingo,” Vincent said, “look, I’m not calling for your termination or anything, just step down and go we’re you anthromorphs are supposed to go – out of power.”

Tech looked at the empty sack and thought of something. “That was some explosion at that restaurant a few days ago, huh?”

Vincent looked surprised at this sudden change of topic. “Um… yes?”

“You know, Rev here had a date with another female roadrunner there that night,” Tech continuing, gesturing towards Rev.

Vincent looked at Rev with quite an unreadable expression. “Did he now?”

“Yes I did,” Rev answered, catching on to Tech’s intentions.

“Oh yes,” Vincent said, “I do seem to recall a female roadrunner was reported missing the next day.”

“And do you know what happened to her?” Tech followed up.

“No,” Vincent said a little less confidently, “can’t say I do. It’s been weeks, though, it’s unlikely we’ll ever see her again.”

“Oh I beg to differ,” Rev said defiantly, “in fact she just came running back to headquarters to just a couple of hours ago.”

“What?! How could she have possibly esc-“

“Aha!” Tech shouted triumphantly, pointing a finger at Vincent. “Now we have you on record for two kidnaps.”

Vincent faced contorted with rage, and then suddenly shock, as if he just had a stunning revelation. He quickly cast a look at his brother, who looked more nervous than ever, then at Ace.

“So are you going to step down or not?” Vincent asked impatiently.

Ace looked at Duck, then at the rest of the team, then at Dan, and then back at Vincent.

“Afraid we can’t do that, Doc.”

“I didn’t think you would,” Vincent murmured menacingly. “No problem. I have prepared for this. Team, reveal yourselves.”

In a moment of great horror, an overwhelming swarm of villainous personas crept out of the shadows cast by the buildings around them. It was as if the undead were rising from the grave. The Loonatics looked around in panic as the super villains emerged, beginning to form a blockade around the six. There must have been twenty or so. The Loonatics, as much as they had fought, had never fought this much before. The villains then stopped moving, having successfully assumed their respective positions.

“Now then,” Vincent spoke with a devious smile, “crush them.”




-- Edited by Dragon Wing at 00:13, 2008-05-11

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w00t...

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Whooo, constructive replies! =D

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This is so tense! And finally! Everything has been revealed! Now the Loonatics have to do is defeat those villains like they did before and teach Dan and Vincent a lesson! w00t.gif Go Loonatics! GO!

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GGGAAAHHHH!!! THE SUSPENCE! THE EXCITEMENT! THE CRUELTY TOWARDS DUCK!!!!

Cassidy: *knocks me out with a pillow*

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Akira_Cat wrote:

This is so tense! And finally! Everything has been revealed! Now the Loonatics have to do is defeat those villains like they did before and teach Dan and Vincent a lesson! w00t.gif Go Loonatics! GO!



YAY!! GO LOONATICS!! w00t.gif



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I do like this chapter. It's got a complex rhythm to it. The next Chapter is sure to be quite the fight.
You'll have to change some sentences around a bit, though. I'll run you through on it later. I'm on someone else's computer and it may take a while. x.x

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Yes, GO LOONATICS! GO! *continues to hum-along to "Work This Out"

*waits impaitently for next chapter*

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O8

SOMEBODY SAVE DUCK!!! D8

This is SO GOOD! The tensions you portrayed are making ME tense!!! O=

I like the way you described the orphanage... And how you added how the main office was quite lavish in comparison to the children's area... Poor Duck... ;__;

If i can recall correctly... Was there not a tree in the middle of the play-room? O_o

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DUCK!!!! D8

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O8

SOMEBODY SAVE DUCK!!! D8

This is SO GOOD! The tensions you portrayed are making ME tense!!! O=

I like the way you described the orphanage... And how you added how the main office was quite lavish in comparison to the children's area... Poor Duck... ;__;

If i can recall correctly... Was there not a tree in the middle of the play-room? O_o

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DUCK!!!! D8



Oh yeah! I remember! It was more like a zoo than an orphanage though XD !



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My god Dragon Wing!!! You are a genius! Why the hell didn't I read this story earlier? You know what man, I'm supposed to be the published writer and you're starting to make me look bad biggrin

Anyways, get the next chapter done soon and cut it out with the cliffhangers. I was up 'till midnight reading this because something big would happen at the end of each chapter. Jeez my eyes hurt...xd.gif


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Hey, thanks! =D But I can't promise I'll cut back on the cliffhangers. ;)

...just realized I haven't replied to all of the posts in this thread. o_0

Bandkanon, you haven't ran me through yet. ;D

Anyway, thanks for all the feedback as usual, and I know I haven't update in a while, and I'm so sorry but I still can't update for a while. As you know if you've read my Hiatus thread (lol) I'm in the middle of AP testing and it's been really occupying, and it will continue to guzzle my time until this coming Friday. So you will have to sit tight until then.

But I PROMISE you after that it's full speed ahead. School will pretty much be over (since I'm a senior) and there will be FREQUENT updates because of it.



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I CANNOT WAIT! *waits anyway*

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You just did another cliffhanger without even trying!furious
Icy: Jeez Serenity, chill out or I'll make you chill....and you don't like how I do that....
Me: *gulp* I just remembered I won a free trip to Africa where it's really really hot and your ice powers won't work on me. Bye!sprint.gif
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Me: I SHALL HAVE THEE FERRET GOD OF DOOM SMITE YE DOWN IF YE FAIL TO DO SO!!!!!! I SHAAAAAAALLLLL!!!!!!!!
Ozzie: *standing on a tall pillar in a cape and robes with his stone glowing* MWAHAHAHA!!!!! Do as she says or I shall turn you all into bugs! AHAHAHAHA!!!!!!
Ant:... Is that supposed to be a threat?
Rev: *squeals like a girl and jumps into Ace's arms* They're BACK!!! D8

 I support the ants. =3



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Yes, actually... Angela does have a knack for leaving us on the edges of our seats... D:

But it's a good ploy to keep us continued in her story. :3

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Poor Duck, being left there to rot until the next chapter comes up. xD

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He's just taking a nap. =3

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Duck: *yawn* Now I'm gonna take a lil'... Nappy-poo...

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When my stepmother heard him say that, she spun around on her heel and yelled, "NAPPY-POO????????"

I lolled. 83

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Your STEPMOTHER, heard DUCK, say ''Nappy-poo''?!?

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-ponders- Did I ever get around to reading chapter eighteen? -doesn't remember- o__o; DO YOU KNOW, ANGELA? ...'Cause I don't think I did. D:

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Nappy Poo!!!!!! LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL!!!laughing.gif

* picks him up and smacks Duck's face left and right* Wake up! You're friends are fighting for their lives and your taking a nappy poo!rage.gif
*Duck snores*sleepy.gif
And the villians are attacking Misty Breeze!evileye
*Duck shoots up* TASTE MY WRATH!!!!!!!!!!furious



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Ozzie: *standing on a tall pillar in a cape and robes with his stone glowing* MWAHAHAHA!!!!! Do as she says or I shall turn you all into bugs! AHAHAHAHA!!!!!!
Ant:... Is that supposed to be a threat?
Rev: *squeals like a girl and jumps into Ace's arms* They're BACK!!! D8

 I support the ants. =3



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Yup. That’s Duck. XD

… I watch LU in the living room… So of course she heard it. 83


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Rye wrote:

-ponders- Did I ever get around to reading chapter eighteen? -doesn't remember- o__o; DO YOU KNOW, ANGELA? ...'Cause I don't think I did. D:



I don't think you have!

Read it!

Reeeaadd it.


Also, Chapter 19 goes up today, guys!

'Effin today!

I was going to write it last night, but I ended up not getting home until 6:15 AM. XD


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TODAY???!!!
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TODAY???!!!
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TODAY??!!!

XD
Okay, I'll shut up, now. XD

Look what you've started, Xtream, XD

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YES! YES! Post it! Hurry! PLEEEEEEEEEESE! The suspence! The suspence!

Duck, get back here! Misty wuill be fine but your needed for the next chapter!
Duck:But I'm already awake....
Me: Here, eat this cake...



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Ozzie: *standing on a tall pillar in a cape and robes with his stone glowing* MWAHAHAHA!!!!! Do as she says or I shall turn you all into bugs! AHAHAHAHA!!!!!!
Ant:... Is that supposed to be a threat?
Rev: *squeals like a girl and jumps into Ace's arms* They're BACK!!! D8

 I support the ants. =3



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YAY!! Time for a Party!! *shoots fireworks in the air*

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Oooooooh! Fireworks.......omg.gif

You'd better get it posted soon Angela 'cause Colours was nice enough to fire off ilegal fireworksbiggrin


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Ozzie: *standing on a tall pillar in a cape and robes with his stone glowing* MWAHAHAHA!!!!! Do as she says or I shall turn you all into bugs! AHAHAHAHA!!!!!!
Ant:... Is that supposed to be a threat?
Rev: *squeals like a girl and jumps into Ace's arms* They're BACK!!! D8

 I support the ants. =3



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I'm depressed and tired tonight (I got home at 6:30 am last night/this morning and have only had 3 hours of sleep since) and if I tried to write something it would suck. Sorry, guys. When I wake up and am refreshed I'll have at it.

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Aaaaw...poor Angela. Sleep all day tomorrow if you want. We won't mind. Get your sleep and then you can come up with something awsome. ^_^

She can take her time, riiiiiiiight guuuuys.......wink



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Me: I SHALL HAVE THEE FERRET GOD OF DOOM SMITE YE DOWN IF YE FAIL TO DO SO!!!!!! I SHAAAAAAALLLLL!!!!!!!!
Ozzie: *standing on a tall pillar in a cape and robes with his stone glowing* MWAHAHAHA!!!!! Do as she says or I shall turn you all into bugs! AHAHAHAHA!!!!!!
Ant:... Is that supposed to be a threat?
Rev: *squeals like a girl and jumps into Ace's arms* They're BACK!!! D8

 I support the ants. =3



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Right! Have a good sleep!

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Me: We'll be waiting.

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Apparently my mother thought it'd be a really fun idea to make me clean my room as soon as I got up.

I WILL get this done today. RAAGGHH D:

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Hahahaha! That's hilarious! My mom did the exact same thing to me this morning! The only reason I'm on here is because everyone went out.^_^

-- Edited by lovegreenanred at 14:53, 2008-05-18

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Finally, guise! Its here! Chapter 19! Whoo!

Important chapter, guise.



Chapter 19: Until the End of the World


Everything had started before any of them had time to think. What once was the scene of a drearily tranquil orphanage now resembled a scene from the apocalypse.

The sky above was obscured by a plethora of supernaturally enhanced oppressors, circling in like hawks. They seemed to be carried by jetpacks similar to Loonatics’ own. There were a few familiar faces among the crowd - Sypher, Mastermind, Weathervane – but the rest of them were alien. Some looked literally alien, but all of that was irrelevant. There was no time to get acquainted.

Usually, one super villain was enough to give the six of them a good battle. How could five of them possibly take on twenty? Whatever little battle strategies any of the Loonatics had in the back of their minds were instantly lost to the cosmos. Survival instincts were all they had left.

“On the defensive!” Ace screeched as the perpetrators made their attack. The five darted in and out of a battlefield of concentrated, constant attacks. There were no pauses, not one moment to rest – only danger.

The five had no choice but to simply run for cover. Pure adrenaline took over as the five ran behind the orphanage. If they had been using their powers recklessly as to ward off attacks, they wouldn’t have known. Everything seemed so unreal, and somehow in slow motion, as if they were merely observers manifested into the players’ bodies.

Ace dived into some nearby shrubbery, and the other four followed suit. This gave them about five to eight seconds before they would once again be ambushed.

“Okay,” Ace spoke nearly at Rev’s speed, “first of all we need to get away from here since we don’t want any kids getting hoit. Second we really should try to make it back to the tower and figure out what to do from there. That’s all we’ve got right now.”

“Rev,” Tech added quickly, “you have super speed, so go quickly to my lab and get six portable deflecting shields.”

Rev nodded and seemed to flat-out vanish, leaving behind a gust of wind. Not a blink of an eye later the bush was waylaid with several fiery orbs. The four remaining Loonatics jumped out to see Cypher floating above, holding what appeared to be Duck’s eggs.

“Looks like your friend’s a little empty handed.”

Duck. They had nearly forgotten him.

“It’s just a shame that I didn’t have time to snag has quacking powers. I won’t lie, it’s pretty badass. Anyway, I’ll see you critters later. Guys, they’re over here!”

And thus, chaos reigned again. Unexpectedly, however, Slam jumped to the front of the other three.

“Grrbbl stay behind,” he ordered, and the other three, having no other plan, obeyed.

Without hesitation, Slam warped into his tornado maneuver and starts to make circles around the Loonatics. To their amazement, his twister deflected every single orb, laser or some other sort of unidentifiable laser that came their way. Some of the deflected objects rebounded off some of the villains themselves, leaving them injured.

“Wow,” Lexi commented, “Slam’s kicking ass.”

Perhaps Lexi had jinxed it. At that moment, a creature that resembled an anthropomorphic lizard thrusted his abnormally long arms into the earth. Within seconds, the ground shook beneath the Loonatics’ feat, and then they found themselves flung helplessly into the air. They landed far apart from each other, hopelessly exposed.

It was at this moment that a translucent red blur scurried throughout the vicinity. Each Loonatic then felt a small circular object the size of a baseball thrusted into their hands.

“The shields! Good going, Rev!” Ace shouted over all the noise. The five squeezed the object, which released a blinding flash of green matter. In about a second, the Loonatics were each enveloped in a faint green, transparent film of matter shaped like an egg. They were now protected from attacks, but they could still do nothing to eradicate the threat the villains still posed.

Tech took this opportunity to scan the scene in a way he could not before. They were now further away from the orphanage than they were, standing in the middle of a vacant parking lot. What wasn’t lit up by the streetlights was illuminated in a diverse array of colors, due to the villains’ own superpowers. This hue was subsiding, however, since they were beginning to realize that they couldn’t do any damage to the team while they had their deflector shields activated.

Tech sensed a blur of motion on the very outer edges of his peripheral vision. He turned quickly, but found nothing. Well, nothing save a bottle of solution lying on the ground. He scurried over to it, quickly deactivated his shield to pick it up, and then re-activated his shield. The bottle had a faint label, written in dry-erase marker: “n-methyl-1-phenyl-propan-2-amine”.

“Nice move, Loonatics,” a voice shouted from the other end of the parking lot. From a distance, Tech could see Vincent standing alone, right in the middle of the catastrophe. “But clearly you can’t stay in those shells of yours forever. And eventually, I imagine my companions here will grow bored of standing around waiting for you, and may just start taking it out on any of these kind civilians here.” Vincent gestured towards the growing crowd of observers taking witness to the scene about two-football fields-length away.

“Should that happen,” Vincent continued, “it would be out of my hands. These soldiers here are under strict command to attack only you. If you are to remain cowards as you are now, they will get impatient. Whatever may happen as a result of that would be nobody’s fault but your own.”

Tech wondered idly for a moment how one seemingly insignificant man could control twenty super-villains. He let that thought go – there were more important matters on hand.

“Oh, so it would be our fault that you unleashed a bunch a’ super villains? I highly doubt that, mister,” Ace shouted back defiantly.

“If they cannot find me,” Vincent replied, “who else will they blame?”

“Huh?”

And with that, Vincent was gone. Just like that, with no sign of his brother, either.

Tech puzzled over this anomaly for a moment, and then something dawned on him.

“N-methyl-1-phenyl-propan-2-amine… that’s an amphetamine. That has the opposite effect of a benzodiazepine. Hey, guys!”

The others faced Tech, the villains still looming overhead.

“I think this is the solution to release the rope they’ve got on Duck!”

“Nice! But… how are we going to get to him?” Lexi asked, being nearest to Tech.

Tech turned around. Duck was still lying near the orphanage, which was about seventy-five yards away. Not too far of a distance, but a lifetime away with a ridiculous number of oppressors watching your every move.

It was also too late. Tech had spoke without thinking, and about six of the villains flew over to Duck’s body to guard it.

“Crap,” Tech said. He tried to think of something to do, but Ace finished his thoughts for him.

“Rev, Slam, this ones on you guys. Rev, you can move in and out the fastest. Get the solution from Tech and free duck. Slam, you get in there too and use your tornado maneuver to ward off attacks. You’ll both have to deactivate your shields, though. You think you’re ready?”

“Grrbblb ‘ell yes!” Slam said, smiling determinedly.
“You betcha I’ve been waiting for this for months and months Ace and now its time for me to shut up and do this!” Rev added.

“Alright! Okay, Rev, go get the solution thingie from Tech. Slam, all I can say is, ready, set, go!”

While Rev scurried over to Tech to retrieve the potion, Slam deactivated his deflector and made his transformation into a tornado, and raged onward. The villains, of course, took this opportunity to absolutely surge at Slam, but to no avail. Certain more determined perpetrators even took the opportunity to fling themselves at Slam, only to be sent flying backwards. In what seemed like no time, Slam was making a circle around Duck, all the while sending those guarding him in all directions. No one knew Slam’s tornado maneuver had this much power.

“Alright, Slam!” Ace shouted encouragingly. “Alright Rev, your turn, got the solution?”

“Yep!”

“Alright, get in there!”

Rev was already at Duck’s side before Ace could even finish his sentence. With a sense of almost inappropriate determination, Rev emptied the solution onto the rope, which came loose immediately. Duck twitched.

“No, mommy, I don’t want to go to school today!” Duck mumbled, eyes still shut.

Rev slapped him in the face. “Get up you loony we got to get moving fast fast fast!”

Duck groaned in frustration, and got up slowly. “What happened, anyway? What’s going on?”

From within the tornado, Slam shouted. “Duck, Duck!”

“Um… goose?” Duck questioned.

Rev tackled Duck to the ground, just avoiding being hit by an oncoming glowing object from the side. They didn’t know what it was, but surely it was dangerous.

Rev and Duck landed some ten yards away, with the roadrunner on top of the mallard.

“Geez, Rev, what’s your problem? No make-outs!”

“Oh shut up and just take this thing here it’s a deflector shield squeeze it to activate it.”

Rev got up, and Duck followed suit. “Oh, fine,” Duck said, and soon all six were once again enveloped in their shields, Slam having aborted his maneuver.

“Good job, guys! Duck, we’ll explain everything to you later, but as you can see, we’re in a big of a pickle here.”

Duck looked around, just noticing he was surrounded by an absolutely absurd amount of evil-doers.

“…mother,” Duck squawked.

“You’ve got dat right,” Ace replied, “but right now we need to umph-“

Evidently, the villains were not happy with the Loonatics’ success. In a combined effort, five perpetrators team-tackled Ace, deactivating his shield and causing him to fly through the air. He flew like a rag doll right onto a curbstone.

“Ace!” Lexi shouted in shock.

Ace ascended slowly, immediately re-activating his shields, which he never let go of. “I’m… fine…” Ace said, with his arm nevertheless hanging loosely to his side.

“But you’re arm! And you’re head!” Lexi retorted. And, indeed, there was a decent amount of blood dripped down Ace’s face from his eyebrow.

“I said I’m fine, Lex,” Ace said angrily. “We can’t afford to have anybody on the disabled list here. I, for one, will fight until I’m finished.”

They all believed it, of course. Ace would fight until the end of the world.

Tech suddenly lit up. “Guys, I have an idea! It’ll be difficult, but I think it’s our only option. We’ll have to get back to headquarters, but I’m almost positive it will work.”

“Alright, Tech, I’ll trust your judgement. Alright, team, you heard him, let’s-“

Ace’s command was interrupted by a piercing shriek. The same five that had tackled Ace now assaulted Lexi. Her deflector shield also deactivated as she went flying, but unlike Ace’s device, Lexi’s flew to the side. She landed harshly against a nearby wall, dazed and weakened.

And more significantly, absolutely helpless.

“Lexi!” Duck shouted almost in spite of himself.

“Looks like we finally caught a break, guys,” one of the villains said to the others. A good number of them, about ten, all crowded around Lexi.

“No…” she whimpered quietly.

And before the rest of the team had time to do anything, it all happened.

Blinding flashes of light emanated from the villains’ weapons, surging towards Lexi.

There was a sudden, swift movement.

A piercing scream rang out in the night sky.



And Duck's body lay motionless in front of Lexi.

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0.0 .............. *faints*

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sdgsasdjk fjklasdml; awekglxcmbl;mjdgdnshbn, jkbgsv guaklw ahkrbtui ghjkl *scream*

O8

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*faints*

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*coughs*

*composes herself*

*ahem*

~This next part of the post is said in utter sincerity and seriousness~

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Epic. F*cking. Epic.

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*solemn nod*

This chapter is the personified embodiment of the epitome of epicness. It is ultimate. It is supreme. It is unbeatable.

It is perfect.

(There were also hardly any gramatical errors, which in and of itself deserves two thumbs up)

I always knew Duck had it in him. I knew it.

THAT'S WHY I'M A DUCKIE.

You have my undying love for all eternity. The climax was brilliant. The cliffhanger was wonderfully and perfectly annoying. And it was Duck oriented.

You, my dear, are the essence of amazingness.

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Crap. The floor will be filled with passed-out bodies by the time this is over.

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POST EDIT!

I meant everything I said. *nod*

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Gah! I'm still hung up in the aftermath of the awesome feeling this chapter gave me... And no one else is replying! So I haffta keep editing my posts so I don't get smacked for double-posting. D:

I can't believe how awesome this was. I have a free right now, and I think I'm gunna read it for a second time. Actually, yes, I'm gunna read it again. And possibly a third time...

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Haha, I'm glad you noted the Edit, otherwise it would have looked like I ignored all of that!

Wow. I mean, I thought it was one of my better chapters, sure, but I didn't think it was "the personified embodiment of the epitome of epicness."

That'll boost my ego for at least a few days =D

Also, yeah, I always felt Duck had it in him as well. Thus, this.

Oh and if you liek it that much be sure to tell people about it! =D /shameless


Oh, and now I'm afraid I won't be able to live up to this chapter's standards from here on, or at the very least I'm afraid what all happens next will be anti-climatic. D:


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“Geez, Rev, what’s your problem? No make-outs!”

Awesome.

... I got shivers... That last scene... As short as the sentences were, they were fantastic... Blunt and to the point. Brilliant. It definately got the message accross. ;3

I just wanna read it agian and again... Everything could be envisioned perfectly in my mind. I could see it all, as though it were an actual episode on TV.

You have fantastic skills to be able to do that, Angela.

I'M STILL IN THE AFTERGLOW OF THE EPICNESS. I DON'T THINK IT WILL LEAVE ME FOR THE REST OF THE DAY! 8D

Can I be a fingirl of this story? And shamelessly promote it as I have done with Rye's In Acme We Trust???

*hearts the story with epic love*

Epic epic epic epic epic epic.

I should stop rambling nao. *is tempted to read it a third time*

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Of course you can be a fangirl! And a fingirl too, if you'd like! In fact, I'd actively encourage it!

I actually got shivers while writing those last few lines as well. Not tooting my own horn or anything, though.

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*points to her signature* howzat?

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At first I snickered at "amazing dreams" as if it were to mean "AMAZING ASPIRATIONS" or something along those lines, then I realized you were probably referring to the Dace dream Rev had. Then I snickered HARDER.


I liek it muchly! =D



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Okay, the awe of this chapter is starting to wear off... I can go live my life nao. XD

How long till the next chapter?? 8D

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Tuesday. Erm, two days.

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8D

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It isnpires me to be artistic. 83

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OMG if you draw art of this I will love you forever and ever.

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