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This is a free debate thing and review on ocs, i just ask people to look at my ocs first and relay thier thoughts back to me.

Name: Katlin Bunny
Nickname: Kiddo, Katy, Kate
Age: 16
Job: bounty hunter
Powers: force field, one way mind communication
Accent:" brooklyn mixed with African (or Australian)
Species: Bunny (duh)
Family: Jessica Bunny (mother), Paul Bunny (dad), Ace Bunny (brother), Collin Bunny (brother)
Eyes: blue ish green
Hair: Brown
Fur: grey
IQ: 290, but not really a genius. (later explained)
regular clothes: t-chirt jeans, utility belt
utiliy belt compartments: armour that fits into capsul, jet powered skate board, rope, smoke bombs and stuff
BFF: Ace, Cat, Kit and Dili and lexi
Loves: music, martial arts, basher ball, basket ball and goofing off
Hates: Duck (not really), skirts, pink, dresses
Flaws: scared to hell of hights, stubborn and rude
Other: she has braces
Bio: Katy is 5 years younger then Ace but they are so much alike. They both love martial arts and they once planned to be detectives, but that changed when Collin, thier younger brother went crazy and started to claim fire spoke to him and it wanted out. Collin was put in an asylum and Katy, who even at the age of 14, had graduate from school. She left for Africa (or Australia) and became a bounty hunter. There she met up with Cat, aw orld class thief, Kit, also known as The fence as she sells information, and Dili, a homeless girl who works odd jobs. She became friends with them and often recruited them for help.

Katy is offered 600, 000, 000 for catching the Loonatics. She gets the help of her friend sand they plan to split the cash but Kit, who can see the future, finds out Ace is Katys older brother. katy doesnt believe it till shes sees a bracelet she had given ace around his wrist. katy stays with the Loonatics and gets a crush on Tech.

Should i change this around or keep it as it is



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I like that she has braces.....that's great. KEEP that no matter WHAT!
I think you should try and figure out that accent though, I know why it's more than one, buuuut still, maybe make up some kind of word or something XD

The bio is pretty good, though I'd like to know more about Collin....or perhaps the bracelet.
But other wise good job biggrin.gif

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Thanks! I am gonna put up more stuff, i just need some more time to get it all together. and i cant decide wether to have her go to africa or Australia. I like the idea of Africa but i thought it would be better for a sene i'm writing for her to go to Australia.

ok, heres a run down on the braclet.

Its hemp and has a huge bead in the middle with a K in it. It took Katy 3 weeks to make it, and she loved it. When she left for Afric (or Australia) she gave her bracelet to Ace along with a weapon she made himm. it was so if they ever met up again they would know. Ace has never taken the braclet off, ever.

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Okay, i know i'm double posty but mah, dont care.

 Name: Collin Bunny
 Age: 15
 Job: Nutcase
 Powers: controls fire (oh crap)
 Accent: Brooklyn
 Spesies: Bunny (DUH)
 Family: Jessica Bunny (mom), Paul Bunny (dad), Ace bunny (brother), Katlin Bunny (sister)
 Eyes: Green
 Hair: Grey
 Fur: Brownish-grey
 IQ: medium
 regular clothes: straight jaket
 BFF: fire
 loves: fire, drawing fire, looking at fire ect.
 Hates: anything that hurts fire
 Flaws: he is a nutcase
 Other: sometimes talks normal.
 Bio: Collin is the youngest of the bunny family, so he was often ignored by his older siblings. He did help them with solving cases and stuff but more often then not he was alone. Collins only friend was a orange Bear called Flame. One day, Collin heard flame say, 'set us free' Collin ripped open flame and found nothing. Now then Ace, Katy and thier friend Mike came in. Mike was laughing at Collin. It turned out Mike could throw his voice, causeing the bear to seem to be talking. Katy and Ace were horiffied and kicked him out of the house but the damage was done. Collin had no friend. He slowly lost his mind thinking he saw Flame talking to him, telling him to set him free. Collin set fires all the time trying to see flame again. But he just burnt things. Collin was put in an asylum and left there. when Collin got powers they moved him to a fire proof cell. Collin meets the Loonatics when Ace and Katy come visit him. Ace is scared of Collin and stays a bit away. Collin gets confused and thinks ace is mike, so he breaks out and trys to get revenge but hes stopped by Katy, Collin becomes sane again. But he kills himself, not wanting to live with the thought of all the people he killed.

okay, this is dark stuff, hey? What do you think

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Whoa, awwww he kills himself? That's gotta be tough on Katy and Ace. :(

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Yeah. It is. They cry for a while, and Katy hates herself.

okay heres cat!

Name: Cat
Age: 17
Job: Thief
Powers: Super speed and super strength
Accent: AFrican or Australian
Spesies: roadrunner
Family: Mum, Dad (thieves)
Eyes: red
Hair: blue
fur, feathers: light blue
IQ: average
regular clothes: tan shorts and green shirt.
BFF: Katlin
Loves: music and skate boarding
Hates: Duck, dresses, skirts
Flaws: a little happy go lucky and obnoxious
Other: she has a speacialy made skateboard.
Bio: Katlin had been raised by professional thieves, but she wasnt interested. She preferd skateboarding but soon she was chin deep in her job. She tries to steal Katlins purse but doesnt get far. But Katlin knows she needs people in the under world so she compromises with Cat, she lets it go and Cat reports to her. Cat and her become friends.
Cat has a huge crush on Rev, and him back on her.

Where should i have them be?

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