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kari bunny · Out of This World

i quit because im not good enough

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

Hmm... Nice layout, the repeatition with the said the voice/shadow/evil voice was used effectively, and it sounds like somethings gonna happen to our beloved Duck. Nice work.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Black Oracle · Black Hole Survivor

Duck's hearing voices! That can't be a good sign. Just watch out for your some of your spellings there Kari.

-- Edited by Black Oracle at 09:17, 2007-03-18

-- Edited by Black Oracle at 11:04, 2007-03-18

Rye · Anthros

Maybe you could try using quotation marks.
It would be smoother to read. =3

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 2:a day off

duck woke up with sweat running down his face,he got up and left the room,duck walked into the
living room...

what was that those voice's thought duck as he sat down on the couch

duck you ok asked ace putting a hand on his sholder

ya you don't look to good said lexi from the kitchen

duck got angery and kiked ace across the room and he hit a wall

ace stood up weakly as the other's rushed over to him

duck panted heavaly

boy duck is angery said tech

duck stopped hearing those same words from his dream in his head

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 3:I QUIT FOR GOOD

duck fell to the ground dizzy from all the voice's he was hearing

the loonatics jumped up and ran over to duck

duck duck wake up said lexi

duck-said rev

duck shook his head as he got up and saw that his team mates were glaring at him and zadavia

WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU shouted tech

YOU COULD HAVE SEIOSLY HERT ACE shouted lexi

but started duck

SHUT-UP-shoted rev and slam

OK I GET IT shouted duck

YOU'RE ALWAYS BLAMEING ME FOR EVERYTHING shouted duck well everone was silant

BUT MYEBE I COULN'T CONTRUL MYSELF shouted duck

BUT NO IM TO BLAME AGAIN shouted duck

NOW i RELISE SOMETHING I QUIT shouted duck and he quaked out of hq

end of chappy three

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 4:joining the evil optimatis

duck walked down the street angerly not knowing he was about to hit optimatis

wach it said optimatis angerly''well if it isnt the duck''

hello said duck bowing

come to his senses eh said dauch(bad spelling)

i see he did said rupes

rise said optimatis and duck did what he was told

do you want to help us get ride of the loonatics asked optimatis

of course sire said duck bowing respectfully

optimatis and rupes smiled

duach(ack bad spelling)said optimatis''you must find him new clothes and train him to be a worrier''

of course said duach(bad spelling)and he and duck walked away

end of chapter 4

ruthchang93 · Martian

It's Duece... I think.

Akira_Cat · Your local cat

Uh oh. This can't be good. Duck joining the evil forces that is. Spellings do need improvement but this is getting interesting. I'm just wondering what's gonna happen now.

zadavias_spirit · Out of This World

Deuce is too hard to spell!!!!! *dies of frustration* I used to think it was Duuse or something until very recently.
Nice story, though. The others were being pretty unfair to him.

Can't wait for the next chap.!

kari bunny · Out of This World

thanks zs i'll put up the next chapter soon

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 5:to be a worrier

duck and deuce walked into an arena type thing,duck was now in a black cloke type thing and had
a metal staf in his left hand.

to be worrier you must think evil thoughts to be a worrier you must be ready to kill said deuce

i understand said duck smirking

good said optimatis''because we will be fighting them soon''and he walked away

now lets fight said dauce holding out his metal staf,after some flips,turns and bruses later they were finnished...

duck you must be ready to kill at all costs said rupes appering''your friends are traitors and you
must keep that in you're soal forever''

duck eyes turned red

woah chill said dauce''oh and one more thing don't let them know it's you leave them vanerable
understand''

duck bowed and his eyes turned back to the blue they once were

end of this chapter

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 6:confrentations

the loonatics were figting optiforces..

what do we do said tech

fight said ace and he grabed lexi's hand pulling her from harms way

thanks said lexi

gghdg (um you guys)said slam seeing optimatis,dauce and rupes walking to them

my brother said zadavia as the optiforces walked to the sides

hello sister said optimatis standing inf front of her and smiling evily

you will pay said zadavia

not on my watch said said duck standing on a cliff

everyone gasped

DUCK shouted everyone

end of this chappy

Siamese712 · I blamed it on the dog...

Next Chappe!! Next Chappe!!

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 7:i hate you all

what he replid colliy

what are you doing asked zadavia

getting even said danger duck and he pulled out a swored and waked ace on the head causing blood to pour out.

duck why said lexi

because i want respect i never got that with you guys said danger in a venamis voice

but said tech

SHUT UP he roared

but duck said lexi as she held ace close

i i said duck

duck said zadavia and he slapped her on the face

I hate you all said danger duck and he raised his swored on zadavia when....

end of this chappy

ha ha cliffhanger

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

me: HOW DARE YOU HURT ACE!!!!! -grabs sword from Duck and starts whacking him repeadily over the head with it- DONT YOU DARE TOUCH HIM AGAIN OR IT"LL BE THE LAST THING YOU EVER DO!!!!!
Duck: -cringing from the blows- ow. Hey. ow. Stop. ow. That. ow. Leave. ow. Me. ow. Alone! ow, ow, ow, ow.......
me: YOU COME NEAR HIM AGAIN AND I'LL REALLY GIVE YOU SOMETHING TO SAY OW ABOUT!!!!
Duck: ok, ok! just stop!
me: -stops hitting him- Thats better.

I get protective wink

.

Good going so far kari! Waiting to see Ch.8! biggrin

Siamese712 · I blamed it on the dog...

NNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!

Duck how could you. you hit Ace in the head of all places and slapped zadavia and,

OMG I have to know what happens!!!!!!!!

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 8:regret and flashbacks

duck raised his swored when he stopped and and stared before cutting zadavia on the arm and head

im sorry muttered duck and he ran to tech before hitting him on the head

duck body began to glow a blue couler and he dropped his swored

what's happening said optimatis

ha said rupes

duck body glowed briter

flashback....

danger was going into kidergarten with his adpotive mother caroline

mommy will i have fun asked the younger danger

of course said carline and they reached the classroom

duck walked in and saw all the kids laughing at him

this scared him for life

end flashback...

NO!said danger duck and the blue light faded and he grabbed his swored and....\

end chapter

ha nother cliffhanger

zadavias_spirit · Out of This World

So let's see.....
Duck is evil *at least we think he is, perhaps there will be a plot turn*...
Ace is bleeding from the head......
I suppose Tech is bleeding too (NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!) unless he's regenerated himself...
Zadavia's been slapped...........
AAAHHHH!!!!!!!! CLIFFHANGERS!!!!!!
Love this story!!! But why did Duck apologize to Tech and not Ace or Zadavia?

kari bunny · Out of This World

duck apagized to tech because he knew he could regenerat himself

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 9 :sacarficing

duck turned on optimatis and nearly hit him on the head

IM SICK AND TIARD OF THIS OPTImatis shouted duck

what are you gonna do about it said dauch

one thing i shoda done before said danger duck standing infrount of zadavia and the team

whats that said rupes

giving up my life said danger duck

no not you're's zadavia's said dauch and he fired a beam causing the roof to come down on
zadavia

NO said danger duck pusing her out of the way and getting barid

dig him out said rev and the dug him out he was nearly dead

duck why said zadavia

im..sorry....i...tried said duck before taking his last breath

end of this chappy

more to come ok

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

NOOOOO!!!! Duck!!!! You can't die!!!!! Noooooo!!!!!

A good yet sad story kari.

kari bunny · Out of This World

i so happy everyone likes it ....anyway to chapter....

chapter 10:death and revival

duck's eyes slowly opened as he saw a light at the end of a corradoir

come to the light said a voice

what muttered duck

come here andrew said the voice

no said danger duck and he walked away only to be held back by a force

andrew please don't go said the voice and he saw his face it was optimatis

NOOOOOO! said danger shooting up and glowing blue

the loonatics and zadavia gasped in shock as well as the villans

you can't control me any more optimatis said danger

but yes he can said dauch attck duck but only to be thrown back by a tremendos force
coming from duck.....

end of this chapter...

2 more chapter's to go

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Who in the world is Andrew? confused

Only two more chappies left?! Wow!

kari bunny · Out of This World

andrew is my name for duck

doggirl2772 · Out of This World

Ok now I understand! smile

kari bunny · Out of This World

chapter 11:the battle

what the said rupes

no said optimatis''the power has awakened''

duck was still glowing the tremendos blue couler,the loonatics stared in aw as they watched there
friend fight for them in great dismay.

so the duck wants to play said dauch

ITS ANDREW shouted duck and a swored appered in his hands and charged at dauch,there sworeds clased and clashed,they were fighting and badly cut each.

give up drew said dauch

never said andrew and he stuk dauch through the cest killing him instantly

andrew fell to his nees in pain and the other rused up to him

duck duck said lexi and andrew was panting heavaly

well sister i hope we meet again said optimatis was killed by his sister instantly

andrew duck slowly fell unconcis as the other's rused him to hq

end of this chapter

kari bunny · Out of This World

LAST CHAPTER

chapter 11:the end and a kiss

andrew slowly opened his eyes to see his team mates staring at him with great concern

you ok der danger said ace''i meen andrew''he looked sad

uh sure said andrew looking down before getting up and leaving the room

andrew really felt bad for what he did so he went to the window of hq and
looked down apon the city.

tech and rev looked at him with great sorrow,slam looked upset and lexi looked
like she was crying,acctually she was crying so ace held her close,zadavia walked in
placed a hand on his sholder.andrew looked at her,her was almost as tall as she was,
zadavia's eyes were filled with sadness and sorrow.

im sorry said andrew ''i don't no what came over me,well i do but''his voice trailed
off.

duck said zadavia''we all forgive you''and she kissed him on the cheek
causing him to go a very deep shade of red.

uh said andrew''thanks''

so ya ready to be a hero again andrew said ace smiling

no said andrew plainly''i want to be an officer for the acne police unit''and
the other's nodded.

actually i will be a loonatics again ace said andrew and they all hugged

thanks for everything said andrew

END WAS IT GOOD OR NOT PLEASE TELL ME....