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The Futur, the Past and the Present
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Ok... I know... my english is not good... but I will try (And I hope someone help to to do corrections)


Chapter 1
The visitor

This day almost finish and nothin happened, after all the battles, the Loonatics are happy to have one day free. Lexi is on the armchair and listening her favorite music, Ace is meditating and Slam and Duck are playing Pool.
 At this hour Tech and Rev are in the laboratory and Zadavia, after they defeat her brother, returned to her planet to help her people, she will return at midnight.
 But this pacific day will be the strangest day of all their life, when they will know someone that knows them…
 -I see… I’m early…- a strange man was outside of the LU building –well… If the archives are correct… they will listen the alarm… now!-
 Just when he said those words, the HQ alarms begin to sound. Immediately the Loonatics go to the meeting room to see what is happening.
 -And now… all the Loonatics are going to the meeting room… except two- when that mysterious man said that, a strange energy appear in his hand –and those two are defenseless jejejejeje-
 -Hey Lex…didn’t you hear the alarm???- Duck was looking to Lex, who haven’t moved
Lex looks to him with a boring face –not now! Just the day that we can rest… I wanted to go to see a movie-
 Duck open his mount to say to her something when a strange light appear in that place and before Lex and Duck could notice,  a Black bunny appear from the nothing and pushed them just when a strange energy destroyed the armchair and where Duck was.
 -NO!!!! Impossible… how can be they still alive…- he looked troubled… -is true… I forget Dominique Quantum Quack…- and the mysterious man disappears.
 The others Loonatics react when they listen the explosion.
 -Lexi… Duck… are you ok???- Ace began to scream when the rubbish moved. He saw Lex and Duck save but stunned… but there was a mysterious person.
-Who are…- Tech couldn’t finish. They didn’t saw the light, and now this was bigger.
 From that light appear a cute girl bunny, her skin was gray like the one of Ace, but she has a long blonde hair, part of it covert her left eye. One of her ears fell on her face.
 -Is he here? - She said.
-No… he scape… I could save them from him- the bunny that was with Duck and Lexi has black skin and his eyes are blue
-What-is-happening-here!!!- Rev looks to those two bunnies when they saw another creature appear from the light… this time it was a black coyote with green eyes.
-What happen is that we saved the life of your friends- the coyote looked to Rev
-Do you think I will believe of that!- Duck finally talk –How can we know that this is no something from all of you
-Duck! He saved our lifes!- Lexi look angry with Duck
-For one I think Duck is right- Ace answered prepared to attack if one of them attacks
-No Ace, they are not our enemies… look! - Tech indicate the light when a girl Road Runner and a silver color Tasmanian appear
-What? - Ace look surprised
-They have our same specie! - Lex looks to them
-Why there’s no a Duck???- All the presents look to Duck, in that moment, when the light was disappearing appear a little girl Duck. She was yellow skin and is redhead. When the black bunny looked at her he became angry
-Lalila!!! What I told you… do not come here!- he go where she was –now return-
-Impossible… one the door close we have to wait 6 hours before we can open another one! - The coyote answered. The little duck eyes look like challenging to the Bunny
-WAIT A SECOND! - All saw to Ace –Now… I want an explanation… and I want it now!!!-
 All the present decided to go to the meeting room.



-- Edited by Tyranee at 13:28, 2007-04-23

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I can do corrections! 8D Since the school systems banned dA, I've nothing really important to do...

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The day is almost finished and nothing major bad has happened. After all their battles, the Loonatics are happy to have one day free. Lexi is on the armchair and listening her favorite music, Ace is meditating and Slam and Duck are playing pool.
At this time, Tech and Rev are in the laboratory, and Zadavia, after they defeated her brother, returned to her planet to help her people. She had promised to return at midnight.
But this specific day will be the strangest day of all their lives, when they will realize someone that knows them…
“I see… I’m early…” A strange man was outside of the LU building. “Well… If the archives are correct… they will listen the alarm… now!”
Just when he said those words, the HQ alarms begin to sound. Immediately the Loonatics go to the meeting room to see what is happening.
“And now… all the Loonatics are going to the meeting room… except two,” As that mysterious man said that, a strange energy appeared in his hand. “And those two are defenseless, heheheheh…”
“Hey Lex…didn’t you hear the alarm???” Duck was looking at Lexi, who didn’t move.
Lexi looked at him with a exasperated face. “Not now! And it’s just the day that we can finally rest… I wanted to go to see a movie.”
Duck open his mouth to say something to her when a strange light appeared and before Lexi and Duck could notice, a black bunny appeared from nowhere and pushed them just when a strange energy destroyed the armchair where Duck was.
“NO!!!! Impossible… how can be they still alive…” he looked troubled… “It’s true… I forget Dominique’s Quantum Quack…” And the mysterious man disappears.
The others Loonatics react when they hear the explosion.
“Lexi… Duck… are you ok???” Ace began to scream when the rubbish moved. He saw Lexi and Duck, safe but stunned… but there was a mysterious person.
“Who are…” Tech couldn’t finish. They didn’t see the light, and now this was bigger.
From that light appeared a cute girl bunny. Her fur was gray like Ace, but she had long blonde hair, part of which covered her left eye. One of her ears fell on her face.
“Is he here? “ she said.
“No… he escaped… I could save them from him.” Ehe bunny that was with Duck and Lexi had black fur and his eyes were blue.
“What-is-happening-here!!!” Rev looked to those two bunnies when they saw another creature appear from the light… this time it was a black coyote with green eyes.
“What happen is that we saved the life of your friends.” The coyote looked at Rev.
“Do you think I will believe of that!” Duck finally said. “How can we know that this is something from all of you-”
“Duck! He saved our lives!” Lexi looked angrily at Duck.
“For one I think Duck is right,” Ace answeredm, prepared to attack if one of them attacked.
“No Ace, they are not our enemies… look!” Tech indicated the light while a girl Road Runner and a silver color Tasmanian appeared.
“What?” Ace look surprised.
“They have our same species!” Lexi looked at them.
“Why there’s no Duck???” All present look tat Duck, and in that moment, when the light was disappearing appeared a little girl Duck. She was yellow skin and was redheaded. When the black bunny looked at her, he became angry.
“Lalila!!! What did I tell you… do not come here!” He went to where she was. “Now return!”
“Impossible… once the door closes, we have to wait 6 hours before we can open another one!” The coyote answered. The little duck eyes look challenging to the Bunny
“WAIT A SECOND!” Everyone looked at Ace “I want an explanation… and I want it now!!!”
Everyone decided to go to the meeting room.

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Well...it's in English now... XD

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the_oddity wrote:

The day is almost finished and nothing major bad has happened. After all their battles, the Loonatics are happy to have one day free. Lexi is on the armchair and listening her favorite music, Ace is meditating and Slam and Duck are playing pool.
At this time, Tech and Rev are in the laboratory, and Zadavia, after they defeated her brother, returned to her planet to help her people. She had promised to return at midnight.
But this specific day will be the strangest day of all their lives, when they will realize someone that knows them…
“I see… I’m early…” A strange man was outside of the LU building. “Well… If the archives are correct… they will listen the alarm… now!”
Just when he said those words, the HQ alarms begin to sound. Immediately the Loonatics go to the meeting room to see what is happening.
“And now… all the Loonatics are going to the meeting room… except two,” As that mysterious man said that, a strange energy appeared in his hand. “And those two are defenseless, heheheheh…”
“Hey Lex…didn’t you hear the alarm???” Duck was looking at Lexi, who didn’t move.
Lexi looked at him with a exasperated face. “Not now! And it’s just the day that we can finally rest… I wanted to go to see a movie.”
Duck open his mouth to say something to her when a strange light appeared and before Lexi and Duck could notice, a black bunny appeared from nowhere and pushed them just when a strange energy destroyed the armchair where Duck was.
“NO!!!! Impossible… how can be they still alive…” he looked troubled… “It’s true… I forget Dominique’s Quantum Quack…” And the mysterious man disappears.
The others Loonatics react when they hear the explosion.
“Lexi… Duck… are you ok???” Ace began to scream when the rubbish moved. He saw Lexi and Duck, safe but stunned… but there was a mysterious person.
“Who are…” Tech couldn’t finish. They didn’t see the light, and now this was bigger.
From that light appeared a cute girl bunny. Her fur was gray like Ace, but she had long blonde hair, part of which covered her left eye. One of her ears fell on her face.
“Is he here? “ she said.
“No… he escaped… I could save them from him.” Ehe bunny that was with Duck and Lexi had black fur and his eyes were blue.
“What-is-happening-here!!!” Rev looked to those two bunnies when they saw another creature appear from the light… this time it was a black coyote with green eyes.
“What happen is that we saved the life of your friends.” The coyote looked at Rev.
“Do you think I will believe of that!” Duck finally said. “How can we know that this is something from all of you-”
“Duck! He saved our lives!” Lexi looked angrily at Duck.
“For one I think Duck is right,” Ace answeredm, prepared to attack if one of them attacked.
“No Ace, they are not our enemies… look!” Tech indicated the light while a girl Road Runner and a silver color Tasmanian appeared.
“What?” Ace look surprised.
“They have our same species!” Lexi looked at them.
“Why there’s no Duck???” All present look tat Duck, and in that moment, when the light was disappearing appeared a little girl Duck. She was yellow skin and was redheaded. When the black bunny looked at her, he became angry.
“Lalila!!! What did I tell you… do not come here!” He went to where she was. “Now return!”
“Impossible… once the door closes, we have to wait 6 hours before we can open another one!” The coyote answered. The little duck eyes look challenging to the Bunny
“WAIT A SECOND!” Everyone looked at Ace “I want an explanation… and I want it now!!!”
Everyone decided to go to the meeting room.

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Well...it's in English now... XD



THAAAAAANNNNKKKKSSSSS!!!!! awwawwaww

 



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Oooh! I think I know what's going on ;)

And I think I like it :D

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Yay Tyranee! You posted the fic you wrote! It's intriguing, I'd like to see what happens next.

And well done to Oddity for correcting the grammar.

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I'm being helpful! 8D

... :( I still suck, though

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I take it that these are the Loonatics descendents you talked about Tyranne? They went back in time and met their parents......

Question: why did Duck and Lexi's son (that black bunny) want to kill Duck? Unless he thought it was someone else......

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Lumosnight wrote:

I take it that these are the Loonatics descendents you talked about Tyranne? They went back in time and met their parents......

Question: why did Duck and Lexi's son (that black bunny) want to kill Duck? Unless he thought it was someone else......



He saved Duck and Lexi lives... is only that Duck think (and look like that) he attacked them...



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Yay, you posted your story Tyranee! w00t.gif

It's a very interesting start. I love your designs for the Loonatics descendents. I can't wait to see what happens next. smile.gif

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