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Hey my peeps! I wrote this in hopes of getting out of my writing slump. Dunno if it worked or not so I'll let you guys be the judge. And do I need a disclaimer? I think we all know that I don't own the Loonatics; cause if I did, I'd be glomping Ace 24/7. Maybe Tech and Rev too.
P.S. This is gunna be in Lexi's Point Of Veiw the whole time.
P.P.S This means the song I used. Not the story.
P.P.P.S. If anyone here is squeamish of character deaths or blood, I advice you not to read anymore. Alright? Good! Let the story begin!

Whispers In the Wind
"The lights go out all around me;
One last candle to keep out the night...
And then the darkness surrounds me;
I know I'm alive, but I feel like I've died..."

I sit in the darkness. Waiting; watching. I keep looking over my shoulder. I can't be captured, not this time. The plan is too close to being finished for that.

I look over for our leader. We haven't seen or heard from him in over an hour. Dreadful thoughts enter my mind; But we have to keep moving, otherwise those thoughts will become a reality.

“C'mon Lex. We gotta go!” a deep voice says from somewhere off to my left. I don't move when I hear my teammates rush past me; I'm still waiting. Still following orders.

“We can't just abandon him!” I snap back as I feel a tug on my arm. I'm turned to face who I'm pretty sure is Tech.

“Lexi, Ace told us that there would be dangers and consequences in this. He also said to get out of the building as soon as we could; that there would be no turning back at any time. We can't just let him die in vain!”

I wince at those words. They stung horribly but I knew that he was right. I'm pulled to my feet by my green and black clad teammate and pulled down the corridor. We reach the door but we keep running; him not wanting to be near the dreadful place as much as me.

Suddenly, the ground starts to shake. We fall forward on our stomachs as we turn around to gaze at the eruption. The timer has gone off. It's covered in fast spreading fire as everything around it turns ablaze. Orange, yellow and red flames reach up, trying to lick the stars themselves.

I feel my heart drop as I pull my arm out of Tech's grasp and turn on the com link. “Ace? Ace? Answer me!” Nothing. The scratchy sound of static hits my sensitive ears before the com link dies. My stomach sinks down even farther. I watch in silent horror as the building's flame dances before my eyes. I have let this happen. I have betrayed him. I have killed my leader.

"And all thats left is to accept that its over;
My dreams ran like sand, through the face that I've made...
I try to keep warm, but I just grow colder;
I feel like I'm slipping away..."


The rest of that year, I was closed off. From my team; from my friends; from myself. I kept repeating that nightmarish mission over and over again, rethinking my actions and what I could've done to stop it.

My waking moments were filled with sorrow, regret and depression while my dreams ran wild; so that I saw the event from different points of view. Mine; my teammates; the villain's; his... all bombarding me with more questions and eating away at my answers. Ace's face haunted my dreams; always shaking his head and saying he was disappointed in me. That I turned on him; back stabbed him. I would plead with him saying that I never meant it; I would then wake up, tears streaming down my cheeks and dampening my pillow. And when I finally came out of my slump, I regretted it full force.

As soon as I was coming around, terror struck again. This time in the form of a telepathic psychopath. He tortured us, one by one, slowly out of sanity. Making us relive our horrors and dreams. We fought our hardest. But it was no match to the power of our minds. When Duck slipped free of the maniac's grasp, he fought and defeated the man. He then went on to help us out of our own nightmares. Unfortunately, he was too late for one of us. Rev's young mind hadn't been able to control or fight off his restraints; and by the time we brought him back home, he had been lost.

And I fell back quickly into my depression.

"After all this has passed, I still will remain;
After I've cried my last, there'll be beauty from pain...
Though it won't be today, someday I'll hope again;
And there'll be beauty from pain...
You will bring beauty from my pain..."


During this period in my life, I continued to stay shut up in my own body. I never spoke of our losses; never once. Maybe that was my mistake. Maybe I should have talked about it more openly, instead of reviewing it over and over in my head. I admit, what I was doing was not the best way to deal with it. But I can tell you; during that time, my sorrow had gotten the best of me.

"My whole world is the pain inside me;
The best I can do is just get through the day...
My life before is only a memory;
I wonder why God lets me walk through this place..."

Two years later, I was trying my best to get out of my depression war. It had grown so out of hand that I went to group talkings to shrinks to doctors; trying desperately to find help. And I can proudly say that I finally beat it. I was finally able to reflect on the past without withdrawing into myself. And it was just as well too; for I'd soon find that it'd be put up to another test.

It was just another day. Normal, nice blue skies without a speck of cloud. The four of us decided to take the day off but before it could be put into action, we got a call. It was from the Acmetroplis Army. There was an emergency at the base. Apparently another villain had escaped and was now destroying everything in it's path. Of course we rushed right over and set up a plan to capture the guy. We broke out of our little huddle just in time to dodge a hover truck that had been aimed at us.

I growled inwardly as I saw another vehicle being aimed at Duck. I yelled at him to get out of the way, but it's too late. He gets hit and goes flying into a building along with the truck. The building they crash into breaks and crumbles, burying him in rubble. “DUCK!” I screamed, running towards him.

I never made it to him. I blacked out moments after I screamed.

"And though I can't understand why this happened;
I know that I will when I look back someday...
And see how you've brought, beauty from ashes;
And made me as gold purified through these flames..."

I had no idea how long I'd been out, but when I awoke I was in a hospital room. It was deadly quiet from lack of people and there were many soft noises of machines all around me. But despite all these distractions, I heard the slow steady beat of someone's heart.

I turn my head to see brunette hair on a tanned, furry body. Cracking an eyebrow up in surprise, I woke up my older sister. “Lianna? What's going on? Why are you here? Why am I here?” She just cried and hugged me; talking to me in that 'it's alright. Your okay now. Your safe now' older sibling voice. She then told me to get some more sleep and that she'd explain everything in the morning.

I refused and asked her the questions again. Looking at me and seeing the stubbornness in my eyes, she told me everything. From what happened after I had blacked out to when I woke up. I nod, listening slightly; for I had a bigger question on my mind. “How's Duck? Will he be okay?” I can see the pain in her eyes as she answers, “Lexi, I'm so sorry but... he didn't make it.”

My heart drops faster then a ball of lead but I feel it dangling like on a thread in my chest. “Ho... how's Tech and Slam? How are they taking it?” Again, sadness and pain in her eyes and voice. “They... they took it pretty bad Lex.” I froze. I ask her what she meant by, 'took it'. Tears start to fall as she then quietly explains, “You have to understand Lexi, they thought both you and Danger had died. So, they went after the villain. You know, to avenge you guys.” She takes a deep breath, “It didn't work out as planned.”

"After all this has passed, I still will remain;
After I've cried my last, there'll be beauty from pain...
Though it won't be today, someday I'll hope again;
And there'll be beauty from pain...
You will bring beauty from my pain..."

I remember bursting into tears at this. I had continued to cry my heart out until a nurse came in and stuck a needle into my arm; slowly releasing the fluid into me. My cries became softer as the drug took it's toll and put me into a heavy sleep. I can still see my sister's pain and worried face looking down at me as my eyelids fluttered before closing.

"Here I am, at the end of me;
Trying to hold, to what I can't see...
I forgot how to hold, this night's been so long;
I cling to your promise, there will be a dawn..."


The rest of my time in the hospital seemed to crawl by. I would spend many hours just starring out into space, thinking of what the future could now hold for me. Sure, my family members and friends came to see me, but they couldn't help. Nothing helped. I wanted my teammates. I was convinced that them and only them would be able to help me. I had sank back into depression.

I tried desperately to hold onto them. Hearing their voices; seeing their faces. At first, I wouldn't allow anybody to touch anything at the tower. But as time moved on, so did my emotions. I was able to break away from the claws of sorrow once again as me and my sister cleaned out the tower, sold what we could and moved away from the city.

We moved to an old town called Acme Acres. There, I started my full recovery; as well as trying to forget about my former life as one of Acmetroplis' finest heroes. It took a couple of years but I finally had turned around for the better.

I remembered what Zadavia had told me; that day we had lost Ace. “There might be darkness now and it might seem that it'll never end; but do not worry. Time will heal your wounds, not fully, but enough so that you can continue on. Life will be bright someday Lexi. We just have to wait.”'

"After all this has passed, I still will remain;
After I've cried my last, there'll be beauty from pain...
Though it won't be today, someday I'll hope again;
And there'll be beauty from pain..."


I wince as the blade is shoved deeper into my flesh. I could feel the blood trickling down my body from the wound; staining my fur as well as everything around me.

Tears run down my cheeks as I stare up, blurringly, at my assassin's face. What stared back at me was the same cold gray eyes that had killed my five teammates.

He pulls it out of my trembling body before throwing it to the ground; the dagger making a loud clatter as it hit the tiled floor. He gives me a final evil smirk before leaving the house; slamming the door behind him.

I fall to the floor, groaning as I taste the blood in my mouth; a puddle of the red liquid starting to form around me. My family will never find me till later, once Lianna comes back from shopping.

As I take a last breath of air, I whisper to the heavens. “See you soon guys.”

"You will bring beauty from my pain..."
The End.

So? Pretty depressing, I know, but thats what happens when you listen to depressing songs!!! Otherwise, I'm sure I never would've made this. Also, I didn't make the song in this. It belongs to the artist Super Chick and it's called Beauty from Pain, if you wanna look it up. So ya, please tell me what you guys think.

-- Edited by doggirl2772 at 19:53, 2008-01-29

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......I......That wa......good but.........sad...

*cryes*

Bawwwww waaaaa wa waaa wwwaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!

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Good lord that is intense. Definitely a depressing story, yes; shrouded with the death of heroes, innocence, friends, and companions. It was also a bit surprising. I certainly did not expect everyone to die, but that just adds to the well-developed tone of hopelessness and depression. You intertwined the story with the lyrics quite well - it makes me want to give it a shot.

I think the most striking part of this story was the end. It's equally as dark as it is hopeful. Really, really impacting. Superb job, story wise.

I would only suggest keeping with the present-tense throughout the entirety of the prose. The first and last sections were the most striking and climatic parts here, and they were both written in present tense. Otherwise, very sad, but moving, and good job!

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tears.gif Real good and depressing! tears.giftears.gif

-- Edited by Stylediva127 at 00:15, 2008-01-30

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Wanna be right where you are
You set my world on fire
Babe I got a crush on you
I wish upon a star
Can't you see how right we are
We should be together
Babe I got a crush on you


So if you feel the way I do
Would you fancy to
To take a ride beside me?

Me and you, you and me. Living a life in harmony
It's magic(oh it's magic) babe I've got a crush on you [x2]


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That is so heart-wrending. This is absolutely amazing! When I finished reading it, I asked myself what would happen now that all the Loonatics have gone. The amount of detail in there is so immaculate. This I feel should be a greatly respected piece of work and that you should be proud of it. 

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I was about to say the same as everyone else, so I'll just say I say the same as them. It was good and intense, and of course very, very depressing.

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So...depressing...

I can't believe I'm saying this, but I'm actually so used to death fics that I don't cry anymore when I read them.

But still, very sad...

Who was it that killed the Loonatics, I wonder?

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I have to say I was very impressed when I read this on FFnet. This story is deep and depressing, and shows jest how one person can seem to bare the death of loved ones on there shoulders. Even when it is not there fault.

Deep girl, deep.

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That,was very sad;Depressing;But It was still a very;very;good romance story,I
really like it.So you like SuperChick too?!That's cool!

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OMG that was so so sad

*starts crying*

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